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2 Girls; 1 Problem

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nostalgic*pride
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since 08-23-2006
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NowhereVille


0 posted 08-31-2006 04:59 PM       View Profile for nostalgic*pride   Email nostalgic*pride   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for nostalgic*pride

We’ve always been in separate worlds
When sitting side by side
With so many problems we both face
It seems silly we should hide

So what if you’ve got pom-poms
And I haven’t got a spirit at all
We’re both in too much trouble
Not to catch the other when they fall

You’ve got your boyfriend
Sexy and cool
I’ve got my Goth friends
Freaks of the school

A million miles between us
Living the same lie
When daddy robbed the cradle
And ruined our lives

EXPLANATION: Yeah, I'm pretty much gothic, and I was molested by my dad a long time ago. Today, I found out that so has 'little miss popular'. =(
© Copyright 2006 Haley May - All Rights Reserved
buttercupbaby
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since 05-03-2006
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outside in the rain


1 posted 08-31-2006 06:25 PM       View Profile for buttercupbaby   Email buttercupbaby   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for buttercupbaby

wow, im really sorry. I liked this poem, i think maybe you tried a little TOO hard to make it rhyme, and my advice: poetry does NOT have to flow perfectly! just say what you feel, exactly, and try to just let it out w/o making it be too perfect. it was a really really good poem though, i really liked it.
and again, im sorry.
muchos amo amigo
-missy
the_girl_next_door
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since 02-26-2006
Posts 590
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2 posted 08-31-2006 07:27 PM       View Profile for the_girl_next_door   Email the_girl_next_door   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_girl_next_door

Hey I loved this.. I probably wouldn't have understand if you hadn't explained. I'm so sorry about his..

I love the ending about daddy robbing the cradle..

The last line I would add the word both.. It doesn't count up when you add it (syllable wise) but when you're reading it it sounds better
(and ruined both our lives)

~heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

rhia_5779
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since 06-09-2006
Posts 1304
California


3 posted 09-01-2006 04:51 AM       View Profile for rhia_5779   Email rhia_5779   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rhia_5779

im really sorry. but i liked the poem alot. i liked the comparison of both of u with one thing the same but differnt lives
patience_iago
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since 08-30-2006
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4 posted 09-01-2006 03:43 PM       View Profile for patience_iago   Email patience_iago   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for patience_iago

When i read this, i sort of got it, but your explanation confirmed it.

Christ. Im so sorry for that happening, it shouldnt have happened to you, you didnt deserve it.

"There are some days where i believe i might die of an overdose of satisfaction"
-Dali

Bahigano
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since 05-13-2008
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Nebraska


5 posted 05-14-2008 11:16 AM       View Profile for Bahigano   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bahigano

Hey, i'm new to pip but i think that your poem was awesome. really good i don't know why but i had to keep reading it over and over and i don't know why. thanks for posting it, it was awesome.
always
lea
wolfy09
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since 06-10-2008
Posts 93


6 posted 06-12-2008 02:59 AM       View Profile for wolfy09   Email wolfy09   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wolfy09

im so sorry that happened
great poem
lilmissflyaway
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since 01-19-2009
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ohio,usa


7 posted 03-27-2009 02:36 AM       View Profile for lilmissflyaway   Email lilmissflyaway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lilmissflyaway

I loved this poem , the raw emotion it , but i hate that it actually happened to you ,, i know how you feel ,, maybe thats why this poem really connected it was great
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British Columbia, Canada


8 posted 03-27-2009 07:57 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

This is a very poignant poem in that it shows, we are closer to each other than we realize.  Sometimes we just don't know that someone could understand what we have been through, until the similarities surface. Well done!
~XxMz.NerdyRockstarxX~
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since 01-14-2011
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9 posted 01-14-2011 07:59 PM       View Profile for ~XxMz.NerdyRockstarxX~   Email ~XxMz.NerdyRockstarxX~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~XxMz.NerdyRockstarxX~

I LOVE THIS POEM......AND BELIEVE IT OR NOT I WENT THROUGH THE SAME THING WITH A GIRL IN MY HIGH SCHOOL BUT NOW SHE'S MY BEST FRIEND LOL....SO GREAT JOB
 
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