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Fallen angels

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rhia_5779
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Angels, fallen from the sky
you sunk so low, from so high
evicted from heaven for your crime
now to spend life here, for all of time

all of our world was to you
everything different, all of this new
angels thrown out of the clouds
lost in earth, till you were found

you fly no more
never again to soar
wings just vanished
when you were banished

you used to live
in a place without sins
‘Till your curiosity got too much
sealed it, so as an angel all done

there are people so sweet, so nice
often accused of being an angel in disguise
you might wonder could they be
fallen angels, who just seem like you and me

these angels know nothing about their new home
if they find each other, together but still alone
their peers also exiled, reminds them of what they lost
invincible in kindness, an army that can't be stopped

Fallen angels for high above
doomed to earth to teach about love
maybe, we are all in a way angels to someone in our life
we could all be such, Angels fallen from the sky.


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1 posted 08-31-2006 05:02 PM       View Profile for nostalgic*pride   Email nostalgic*pride   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nostalgic*pride

Alright, I really liked this a lot. But, it could do with some SERIOUS editing. A few typos and places where the wording was off. But- overall- the poem was fantabulous!
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2 posted 09-03-2006 07:57 PM       View Profile for *Alli4000*   Email *Alli4000*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Alli4000*

Agreed with the suggestions from the person above me.  But besides that, I found this poem really interesting.  Nice job!

~Alli~
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