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gozaggss
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0 posted 08-30-2006 10:44 PM       View Profile for gozaggss   Email gozaggss   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for gozaggss

Thereís something therapeutic about sitting on a swing
Something magically happy, that makes me want to sing
Because in that seat youíre a kid once more
Toys and laughs. Lisper socks on hardwood floor
These kids donít care about bills or taxes
No need for vacation. Never seen a kid who relaxes
I wish I was a kid again, free without a care
But the truth of it all just surely isnít fair
There are no time machines or elixir of youth
Just lies and smokescreens, to mask the vile truth
Life isnít fun and games, learn to know this
Itís just one long fall. A void, stark abyss
And just before you feel the sharp needle sting
You think back. How nice it would be to sit upon a swing

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patience_iago
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1 posted 08-30-2006 11:33 PM       View Profile for patience_iago   Email patience_iago   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for patience_iago

I really like the story behind this, the feeling, the theme, its really amazing.

"There are some days where i believe i might die of an overdose of satisfaction"
-Dali

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2 posted 09-03-2006 07:58 PM       View Profile for *Alli4000*   Email *Alli4000*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Alli4000*

Yep, sitting on a swing really does take away all your worries and cares doesn't it?  I know for me, whenever I'm swinging on a swing (no matter how old I get) it's just so much fun and makes me feel like a kid again.
Enjoyed this poem by you! Post more soon.

~Alli~
the_girl_next_door
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3 posted 11-08-2006 10:19 PM       View Profile for the_girl_next_door   Email the_girl_next_door   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_girl_next_door

This was really good. The last line made this poem sound very mature and well rounded.. it made it almost like something I would read in my literature book.. wonderful job.. I have this feeling too when i sit on the swing, now that i think about it. Great job! hope to hear more

~heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

cherrys_rule
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4 posted 11-12-2006 01:37 PM       View Profile for cherrys_rule   Email cherrys_rule   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherrys_rule

MAn this was excellent. I bet everybody on this site wishes that they could be a kid again. I know I would. I hope to see more from you in the fututre thanx for sharing with us.
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