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Tempest
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0 posted 08-30-2006 10:10 PM       View Profile for Tempest   Email Tempest   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Tempest


Looking back at myself
How could i be so used
Listening to all those lies
Made me so confused

Mistaken for a friend
You tore the flesh clean through
Relentlessly slashing at my soul
Nothing is all i can do

Ghost in the shadows
Taking the wrong advice
Taking the easy way out
Taking the easy life

You betrayed all foundations
Shaking the meaning of truth
How can you sit there and tell me
Its eye for an eye tooth for tooth
© Copyright 2006 Bryan Girton - All Rights Reserved
the_girl_next_door
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1 posted 08-30-2006 10:19 PM       View Profile for the_girl_next_door   Email the_girl_next_door   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_girl_next_door

Wow. YOu have a way with words that just send shivers down my spine.. The first stanza was good but the last 3 were very catchy and drew me into the poem Great job.

~Heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

bekahlekah45
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2 posted 08-31-2006 03:44 PM       View Profile for bekahlekah45   Email bekahlekah45   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bekahlekah45

Woah.  this was seriously really good.  I like it alot.  i like the last 2 lines. not sure why but i like them.  alot.  i cant pick a favorite stanza cuz i like them all...
nice job!
mgoodman1989
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3 posted 09-03-2006 12:47 PM       View Profile for mgoodman1989   Email mgoodman1989   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mgoodman1989

"Ghost in the shadows
Taking the wrong advice
Taking the easy way out
Taking the easy life"


My favorite stanza. I can understand this one the most I think. Everyone tries to take an easier road every once in a while though.

Great write, 10 outta 10! Lol, Keep 'em coming!

Much Love,

Michelle

*I love him oh yes I do, he's for me and not for you, and if by chance you take my place, I'll take my fist and smash your face!*

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4 posted 09-03-2006 07:57 PM       View Profile for *Alli4000*   Email *Alli4000*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Alli4000*

Yes, this poem was really well written!
Hope to see more from you soon!

~Alli~
patience_iago
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5 posted 09-03-2006 08:40 PM       View Profile for patience_iago   Email patience_iago   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for patience_iago

i really liked this

"There are some days where i believe i might die of an overdose of satisfaction"
-Dali

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6 posted 09-04-2006 10:27 PM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

yeah i havta agree with everyone WOW good write hope to hear more soon...
hunnie*

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heart.

 
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