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To those who will listen

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nostalgic*pride
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0 posted 08-30-2006 05:10 PM       View Profile for nostalgic*pride   Email nostalgic*pride   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for nostalgic*pride

To those who will listen
Let drift your mind
The poem's not sweet
My words are not kind

To those who will listen
Prepare for a war
You'll hear what I say
But not what it's for

To those who will listen
My pain is quite real
You know who I am
Yet ignore what I feel

To those who will listen
Please here my plea
Send a light to the shadows
To come rescue me

To those who will listen
My life isn't all pain
I don't know what's wrong
Perhaps I'm insane

To those who will listen
I'm wasting my breath
Things just wont change
Until I find death

Uber depressing right? Cut me some slack. I was in a BAD (REALLY BAD) mood. And my anger just kind of came out, and the poem didn't turn out that good.

© Copyright 2006 Haley May - All Rights Reserved
cherrys_rule
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1 posted 08-30-2006 08:25 PM       View Profile for cherrys_rule   Email cherrys_rule   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherrys_rule

I thought it did make all since to me. It was really good too.
the_girl_next_door
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2 posted 08-30-2006 10:01 PM       View Profile for the_girl_next_door   Email the_girl_next_door   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_girl_next_door

Hey.. I loved this poem. It's one of the best that I have read of yours. Absolutley amazing!

I loved your first stanza.. it just kinda of drug me into the poem.

"You'll hear what I say
But not what it's for"
~These lines in the second stanza just made me think about a lot of stuff and how people listen to you but maybe not know what you mean.~

"You know who I am
Yet ignore what I feel"
~Again the last two lines in this stanza were amazing. I feel like you put a lot of thought into this.~


The last stanza just kind of set it up just right. Even though is was kind of negative at the end. It was a great way to end it. I loved how you ended the poem with death becuase death ends life. So that's kind of like comparison.. (ex. It might have been weird to have the death part in the middle if ya know what i mean)

great job..

I hope to hear more like this from you!!

~heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

*Alli4000*
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3 posted 08-31-2006 12:10 AM       View Profile for *Alli4000*   Email *Alli4000*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Alli4000*

Aw, I think the poem turned out great!  It's always good to let your anger out through poetry...
Hope you're feeling better now.

~Alli~
rhia_5779
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4 posted 08-31-2006 04:34 AM       View Profile for rhia_5779   Email rhia_5779   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rhia_5779

yeah i can really relate, and it made a lot of sense. that was really good
JosephF
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5 posted 08-31-2006 08:02 AM       View Profile for JosephF   Email JosephF   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JosephF

I can Relate to this a great deal, Very powerful and emotional. Lovely!
in_luv_06
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6 posted 10-06-2006 04:35 PM       View Profile for in_luv_06   Email in_luv_06   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for in_luv_06

i can seriously relate!!! but death isn't the answer no matter what happens...trust me. Good Job!
 
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