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0 posted 08-29-2006 04:34 PM       View Profile for pen&paper   Email pen&paper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for pen&paper


he whole “invisibility thing”…
Yeah
I’m done with it
I’m someone
I should be recognized as someone
not as a target
for abuse
for slander
so that other people feel better
about themselves
I will be recogized as a person
whose morals are good
but does what she wants
not always what she should
I’m just a girl
just someone
who likes to be seen
as someone
who understands who they are
and where they stand
I don’t want to be
what they call cool
I want to be me and-
Ya know what?-
maybe do well in school
if they don’t like that
if they think it’s uncool
I really don’t care
let them be the fool
they can have
their hoochie tops
hidden beer cans
and energy soda pops
and I’ll have
my individuality
my artistry
and what makes me “me”
Live with it!
I don’t want to be anybody else
Stop trying to make me “you”
and let me be “me”
  
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1 posted 08-29-2006 10:28 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

they are jealous, or afraid of you...
that is why they want you to conform, or to be like them...if you do what they do...then what they are doing can't be "that" bad, right? It's called misery loves company...

enjoyed your write
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Hey pen&paper,

Awesome poem! Reminds me a lot of a rap, but I'm listening to rap right now so could that be something? I liked this one a lot- The general subject was very good- I liked how it flows so well.

"I’m just a girl
just someone
who likes to be seen
as someone
who understands who they are
and where they stand"


I loved this part especially, maybe it's cause I wish I felt like this? lol

Great job and thanks for sharing!

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
                     @-->---

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3 posted 08-30-2006 10:07 PM       View Profile for the_girl_next_door   Email the_girl_next_door   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_girl_next_door

I loved this. It expresses the truth and what everyone should take a stand for.. to be themselves!

great job

~Heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

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4 posted 09-03-2006 07:58 PM       View Profile for *Alli4000*   Email *Alli4000*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Alli4000*

I agree with SEA, they are most likely jealous or afraid of you which is why they want you to be like them.
I think you did a really nice job with this poem, keep posting!

~Alli~
 
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