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Death´s sweet sorrow

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By stroke of midnight, the moons overhead
shining in the dark, showing its face
A complete silence,Silence of the dead
wails of anguish pierce the night, and Fate

arrives in Death´s sweet sorrow
a beloved elder has left mortal life
another of the tribe gone tomorrow
heart-wrenching sobs break open the late night

a stillness falls among the village
no dogs bark, the sobs and cries pause
no one wants to talk no words to say
people fall quiet,hardly knowing the cause

the keepers of the settlement keep vigil
untill dawns light, the women keep the dead accompanied till they finally part
faces serene without emotion, just still
heads bowed in rememberance, as the elder,speaks to them deeply heart to heart

when the sun rises, the soul leaves to where they now belong
sorrow and heartbreak lands on the sleeping like a disease
children wake from their slumber,teary,forgetting what it means to be strong
it must be great for the Ngozi, what a mad feast

all the sadness, pain wrenching grief
overwhelming all the adults in such a sweet sorrow
drowning the little ones in such memories
reminding all that cholera might not let Them, live to see tomorrow

no more having to gather food or hunt
never again to arange dowries or hold their child
not any more to feed daughters or sons
maybe the last time to look at thier homeland, Africas wild
  In Death´s sweet Sorrow

An African spirit
note- Ngozi= from africa , they are spirits of people who are not let go of they have some tie to the human earth left, or they were mureded and they haunt people til they are recompensed

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1 posted 08-29-2006 11:11 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

It would appear that you put a lot of productive research into your piece ...
and I found that intriguing~

I found the typos distracting ... you should take the time to use spell-check and present your poetic ideas in a more polished fashion~

Nice effort ... I'd love to see it polished~

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2 posted 08-30-2006 08:51 AM       View Profile for stargal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for stargal

Hi rhia,

This is by far one of my favorites by you!
What I really liked about this one was all the imagery in it, the descriptive words you use are wonderful.

Plus all the thought you put in this one really shows through - Great job

Thanks for sharing

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3 posted 08-31-2006 12:01 AM       View Profile for *Alli4000*   Email *Alli4000*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Alli4000*

I really enjoyed this poem! Keep writing!


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4 posted 04-10-2007 09:02 PM       View Profile for surf_painter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for surf_painter

i felt it just overwhelm me with emotions for these people i didn't know it takes much to do that and i am glad you posted the poem it was very good
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