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I've changed. and that isnt a lie

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bekahlekah45
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0 posted 08-28-2006 08:04 PM       View Profile for bekahlekah45   Email bekahlekah45   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bekahlekah45


You think you know me
But do you?
You say you understand me
Are you sure?

I put on a new face everyday
how could you know me?
i dont understand myself
so how could you possibly?

The life i lead is nothing but fake
every move i make is another mistake
I wish i could fix everything in the
next breath i take

All the lies, all the deciet
what will it take to get me back on my feet?
I've done so much damage can it ever be fixed
Why did i ever get myself into all of this

But tomorrow's a new day
and forever changed will I be
I'll be a better person
And everyone will see.


uhh this deff turned out like crap!  oh well!  
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the_girl_next_door
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1 posted 08-28-2006 10:02 PM       View Profile for the_girl_next_door   Email the_girl_next_door   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_girl_next_door

The poem I think could be worded a little differently to sound more interesting but I really loved the last stanza bc I can relate

~heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

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2 posted 08-29-2006 12:08 AM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

i liked this poem it was good...wow i can relate to some parts too thanks for sharing...
hunnie*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

bekahlekah45
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3 posted 08-29-2006 04:58 PM       View Profile for bekahlekah45   Email bekahlekah45   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bekahlekah45

ty : )
stargal
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4 posted 08-30-2006 09:00 AM       View Profile for stargal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for stargal

Hiya bekah!

I'm not sure I would call this one of your bests but it was very good. The general idea of the poem was awesome; like the idea of putting on a new face everyday, I loved that part, it was so true, yet, not what I was thinking of as part of the poem?

Anyway, I'ma go to work then go to bed so ttyl

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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bekahlekah45
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5 posted 08-30-2006 03:26 PM       View Profile for bekahlekah45   Email bekahlekah45   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bekahlekah45

lol remember when we were talking and i told you "man this is turning out like crap"
haha this is what i was referring too!

thanks for the comment : )
Tempest
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6 posted 08-30-2006 10:01 PM       View Profile for Tempest   Email Tempest   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tempest

Gont listen to them, they dont know...anyways this was GREAT GREAT STUFF YOU CRAZY CRAZY LITTLE FRIEND
bekahlekah45
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7 posted 08-31-2006 03:43 PM       View Profile for bekahlekah45   Email bekahlekah45   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bekahlekah45

lol thanks tempest
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8 posted 09-03-2006 07:57 PM       View Profile for *Alli4000*   Email *Alli4000*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Alli4000*

"i dont understand myself
so how could you possibly?"


I think I could really relate to these lines myself.
Anyhow, maybe this isn't one of your best writings, but overall it's a very good poem.  Keep it up!

~Alli~
mgoodman1989
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9 posted 09-04-2006 05:08 PM       View Profile for mgoodman1989   Email mgoodman1989   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mgoodman1989

"All the lies, all the deciet
what will it take to get me back on my feet?
I've done so much damage can it ever be fixed
Why did i ever get myself into all of this

But tomorrow's a new day
and forever changed will I be
I'll be a better person
And everyone will see"


Definately my favorite part. I can really really relate to this stuff, because I've been there, Today is my tomorrow.

Keep Posting Bekah,

Much love,
Michelle

*I love him oh yes I do, he's for me and not for you, and if by chance you take my place, I'll take my fist and smash your face!*

bekahlekah45
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10 posted 09-05-2006 04:49 PM       View Profile for bekahlekah45   Email bekahlekah45   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bekahlekah45

mucho gracias for the feedback!
im happy to know you guys take the time to read my poetry : )
 
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