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buttercupbaby
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since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

0 posted 2006-08-28 10:08 AM

realizing
that he had actually left
she sat down and cried
cried until she had no more tears
then she wished she'd died.

knowing
that he would never come back
broke her hopeful heart
she tried to pick up the pieces
but she didn't have the strength to start.

wishing
for someone else to love
she prayed to her perfect God
so she waited for her prayers to be answered
heavenly and angelically clod.

waiting
for something to happen
seeing it never would
she knew know her heart was torn open
and it would remain that way for good.

realizing
knowing
wishing
waiting
none of my hearts questions. . .
ever answered.

~missy
My tears of love are a waste of time if I turn away..
my love is a waste of time
if you never stay

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

1 posted 2006-08-28 10:30 PM

i liked this alot. it had some spelling errors in it.. but I'm not the best speller either

good job..

i really like how you pulled it together at the end

~heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

2 posted 2006-08-29 10:32 AM

i liked the ending alot that really wrapped it up and i liked the second stanza alot

stargal
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since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

3 posted 2006-08-30 08:54 AM

"knowing
that he would never come back
broke her hopeful heart
she tried to pick up the pieces
but she didn't have the strength to start."

My favorite part; The whole poem just seemed to flow so well with every stanza; every stanza seemed to fit...

I loved this poem, it's really one of my favorites by you. It's different than all of your other poems - I liked it a lot!

Thanks for sharing!

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

4 posted 2006-08-30 09:25 AM

thank you heather, rhia, and stargal!

wow stargal, im really suprised! i didn't think it was one of my best, but i tried hard on this one [a wee bit more] to rhyme all the way through the poem, and tried to make it flow a little bit more. it just kinda came to me[realizing] that i never knew who to love. and i wished someone would come to me one day, which would be waiting. then i had all those words and decided to use them!
thanks alot y'all, i really like replies!

muchos amo amigos
-missy

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

5 posted 2006-08-31 12:05 PM

I really enjoyed this one by you. I think you did a good job, it flowed nicely.

~Alli~

buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

6 posted 2006-08-31 06:26 PM

thanks again alli=)

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