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buttercupbaby
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0 posted 08-28-2006 10:08 AM       View Profile for buttercupbaby   Email buttercupbaby   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for buttercupbaby


realizing
that he had actually left
she sat down and cried
cried until she had no more tears
then she wished she'd died.

knowing
that he would never come back
broke her hopeful heart
she tried to pick up the pieces
but she didn't have the strength to start.

wishing
for someone else to love
she prayed to her perfect God
so she waited for her prayers to be answered
heavenly and angelically clod.

waiting
for something to happen
seeing it never would
she knew know her heart was torn open
and it would remain that way for good.

realizing
knowing
wishing
waiting
none of my hearts questions. . .
ever answered.

~missy
My tears of love are a waste of time if I turn away..
my love is a waste of time
if you never stay

© Copyright 2006 Marisa F - All Rights Reserved
the_girl_next_door
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1 posted 08-28-2006 10:30 PM       View Profile for the_girl_next_door   Email the_girl_next_door   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_girl_next_door

i liked this alot. it had some spelling errors in it.. but I'm not the best speller either good job..

i really like how you pulled it together at the end

~heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

rhia_5779
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2 posted 08-29-2006 10:32 AM       View Profile for rhia_5779   Email rhia_5779   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rhia_5779

i liked the ending alot that really wrapped it up and i liked the second stanza alot
stargal
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3 posted 08-30-2006 08:54 AM       View Profile for stargal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for stargal

"knowing
that he would never come back
broke her hopeful heart
she tried to pick up the pieces
but she didn't have the strength to start."


My favorite part; The whole poem just seemed to flow so well with every stanza; every stanza seemed to fit...

I loved this poem, it's really one of my favorites by you. It's different than all of your other poems - I liked it a lot!

Thanks for sharing!

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
                     @-->---

buttercupbaby
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4 posted 08-30-2006 09:25 AM       View Profile for buttercupbaby   Email buttercupbaby   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for buttercupbaby

thank you heather, rhia, and stargal!

wow stargal, im really suprised! i didn't think it was one of my best, but i tried hard on this one [a wee bit more] to rhyme all the way through the poem, and tried to make it flow a little bit more. it just kinda came to me[realizing] that i never knew who to love. and i wished someone would come to me one day, which would be waiting. then i had all those words and decided to use them!
thanks alot y'all, i really like replies!

muchos amo amigos
-missy
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5 posted 08-31-2006 12:05 AM       View Profile for *Alli4000*   Email *Alli4000*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Alli4000*

I really enjoyed this one by you.  I think you did a good job, it flowed nicely.

~Alli~
buttercupbaby
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6 posted 08-31-2006 06:26 PM       View Profile for buttercupbaby   Email buttercupbaby   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for buttercupbaby

thanks again alli=)
 
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