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buttercupbaby
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outside in the rain


0 posted 08-25-2006 12:51 PM       View Profile for buttercupbaby   Email buttercupbaby   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for buttercupbaby


I met someone knew today
that took my mind off you
in every single way
your a little too late


now you decide you want me back
but what im gonna say
is sorry babe
your a little too late


its a little too late
for you to decide to love me
a little too late for your tears
its a little too late
to re-hurt me

you want me back
but you cant have me, you see.
its a little too late
to wanna be with me forever

its over hun, your way too late.
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cherrys_rule
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1 posted 08-26-2006 01:29 PM       View Profile for cherrys_rule   Email cherrys_rule   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherrys_rule

it kindda sounds like JO Jo's new song you're a lil too late.But other then the spelling mistakes I thought it was ok i guess.
buttercupbaby
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2 posted 08-26-2006 05:23 PM       View Profile for buttercupbaby   Email buttercupbaby   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for buttercupbaby

i was listening to that song when i wrote it, it inspired me..lol.=)
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3 posted 08-26-2006 11:56 PM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

i thpught it was good... really made sense good post:P
hunnie*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
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buttercupbaby
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4 posted 08-27-2006 10:35 AM       View Profile for buttercupbaby   Email buttercupbaby   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for buttercupbaby

thank you very much!
where have your poems been??
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5 posted 09-03-2006 09:12 PM       View Profile for *Alli4000*   Email *Alli4000*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Alli4000*

Good for you for saying no to this person!  They just sound like they only want you back now that you've finally started to move on.
Thanks for sharing!

~Alli~
mgoodman1989
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6 posted 09-04-2006 05:18 PM       View Profile for mgoodman1989   Email mgoodman1989   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mgoodman1989

I think its great that you used Jojo's lyrics to "inspire" you, however it seemed as though you tried way to hard to be exactly like it. It was a nice write, but personally, not something that I would add to my library, because of its seemingly un-originality.

Sorry if it seems harsh in anyway, its just not one of my favorites.

Keep posting, I promise not to be so harsh on the next one

Much love,
Michelle

*I love him oh yes I do, he's for me and not for you, and if by chance you take my place, I'll take my fist and smash your face!*

 
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