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buttercupbaby
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0 posted 08-22-2006 07:29 PM       View Profile for buttercupbaby   Email buttercupbaby   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for buttercupbaby


i bet you don't know
how much you mean to me
i bet you don't know
that at night i see you in my dreams.


sometimes i laugh at myself
for wanting so much
but the only thing i actually want
is something that i can't touch.


i know it sounds funny
through every single tear
i know its weird
that your voice is the only one i hear


the only voice i comfort in
is yours, such a sweet melody
but its the only one
that also breaks and crushes me.


i know its stuipd to love you still
i should be in such pain
i know you know that you hurt me
you left such a crimson stain.


the only thing i want
and can't touch
that hurts me so so much
is your cold cold dark
heart.
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buttercupbaby
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1 posted 08-22-2006 07:29 PM       View Profile for buttercupbaby   Email buttercupbaby   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for buttercupbaby

don't even try to make me feel good about this one, i just sat down and wrote it.
wow, this has got to be the worse one ever written.
the_girl_next_door
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2 posted 08-22-2006 10:18 PM       View Profile for the_girl_next_door   Email the_girl_next_door   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_girl_next_door


i know its stuipd to love you still
i should be in such pain
i know you know that you hurt me
you left such a crimson stain.

THis is my favorite stanza.. i really like how you described this.

~Heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

rhia_5779
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3 posted 08-23-2006 04:45 AM       View Profile for rhia_5779   Email rhia_5779   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rhia_5779

same i really loved this stanza

i know its stuipd to love you still
i should be in such pain
i know you know that you hurt me
you left such a crimson stain.


i liked the feel of the poem, it described pretty well the feelings in this
stargal
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4 posted 08-23-2006 10:51 AM       View Profile for stargal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for stargal


"sometimes i laugh at myself
for wanting so much
but the only thing i actually want
is something that i can't touch."


My favorite stanza! It was wonderful, it IS wonderful, it describes me, wanting things that I can't have, loved it


"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
                     @-->---

buttercupbaby
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5 posted 08-25-2006 12:35 PM       View Profile for buttercupbaby   Email buttercupbaby   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for buttercupbaby

well, thanks y'all! i didn't think it was that great but thats ok!
thanks alot, i love y'all replies=)
-missy
 
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