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baby_gurl908
Junior Member
since 2006-08-22
Posts 15


0 posted 2006-08-22 04:19 PM


Life is difficalt
  to many problems,
To many worries.
  I'll hurt myself
for you anything
  to feel less,
Its a terrible
  gift from my
Angel.
  Yet i know
no-one knows, I
  keep the true
me hidden, So
  no-one else can
see the scared,
  helpless girl thats
me.
  You say you
love me but
  thats not the
issue is will
  you love the
girl underneath
  me or not,
I want you
too love that
part of me.
  I'm done being
played out by
  you but my
issue is i
  really do love
you.
  I cant hurt myself
if you stay
  cause theres nothing
left to be hurt
  for.....


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mgoodman1989
Member
since 2006-03-05
Posts 93
Iowa, USA
1 posted 2006-08-22 04:24 PM


Different. Uhm, I dunno what to say, it was good, I just... I guess I don't understand it really. I think, its about a girl who hides behind someone she is not. Ashamed to show her true colors? I dunno.

Good job, sorry I don't understand it. Maybe you could clear it up?

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591
USA
2 posted 2006-08-22 10:34 PM


This was different.. a little difficult to read but I loved the meaning and the words you used.. I can see this in stanzas more but if you really concentrate when you read this.. it's really good. keep it up!!

~heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

stargal
Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
3 posted 2006-08-23 01:27 AM


Hey baby_gurl908,

I guess I have to agree with everything said above^^  I found it to be an enjoyable read though, it made you think, to question the meaning of the poem. It was a great mind stretcher!

Also, Welcome to passions!~ I hope you enjoy the site as much as I have.

Thanks for sharing this wonderful first post with all of us, it was a treat to read

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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