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Tempest
Member

since 2006-04-28

Posts 247
dont eat paint chips!!!!

0 posted 2006-08-21 04:14 PM

what am i to you
would you give me a second look
or am i just a statistic
something to put in a book

for every insipid moment
that passes us bye
i know im just a number
on this infinate slide

round and round
till we all fall down
lost in the moment
of beautiful sound

statistics, statistics
thats all we are
statistics, statistics
this is only the start

[This message has been edited by Tempest (08-21-2006 07:59 PM).]

Tempest
Member

since 2006-04-28

Posts 247
dont eat paint chips!!!!

1 posted 2006-08-21 04:17 PM

this ones a tounge twister all right but please know that i wrote this about our future because by the time were old enough to have kids, our parents generation have already gone and screwed it up for us
~Tempest~

P.S. The war on terror sucks

mgoodman1989
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 93
Iowa, USA

2 posted 2006-08-21 04:36 PM

Tempest,

How exciting, being the first to comment I mean. Uhmmm... I really like this. It's true, we're all statistics.

I like the way you write. You say the truth in a way we can all understand.

And, I agree, the war on terror does suck. Big time. Just another example of how generations before us screwed things up.

Much Love,

Michelle

Tempest
Member

since 2006-04-28

Posts 247
dont eat paint chips!!!!

3 posted 2006-08-21 06:28 PM

thats cool that you like my work
much love,
Tempest

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

4 posted 2006-08-29 12:27 PM

wow i was just browsing through the poems and this caught my eye and wow i really liked it but when you put it like that... i don't want to have such a world but i can't live on dreams forever

haha i love your poems so much they all make perfect sense to me...so never stop writing

thanks for sharing yet another great poem...
hunnie*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

5 posted 2006-09-03 07:58 PM

"round and round
till we all fall down
lost in the moment
of beautiful sound

I really liked that stanza! Overall, the poem was excellent, I really enjoy your writings.

~Alli~

stil_watrs_run_deep
Junior Member

since 2008-01-05

Posts 14
missouri

6 posted 2008-01-05 02:50 AM

WOW
thats all i can get out..
i love how in so few words you expressed so much..

i love it!

smiles are universal :]

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