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Tears

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Abiola
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0 posted 08-21-2006 04:32 AM       View Profile for Abiola   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Abiola


Tears drip from my eyes

down into the sea

Don't know how to stop them

want to but can't

Don't know what to do anymore.

I can't stop cryin

Is it because my life is falling apart?

Or am I lettin it fall apart?

No more the person I used to be

Wait!!!!!!!!!! I never was that person

I'm lost now

I really am

Help is what I need

But denial is what I do best

Hey what can I say?

I guess nothing

Life is just passing me by

But in my eyes the wrong way

Abiola
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mgoodman1989
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since 03-05-2006
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1 posted 08-21-2006 05:27 PM       View Profile for mgoodman1989   Email mgoodman1989   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mgoodman1989

Confusing. Different. But very neat. Good Job.
cherrys_rule
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since 03-18-2006
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2 posted 08-21-2006 06:40 PM       View Profile for cherrys_rule   Email cherrys_rule   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherrys_rule

i didn't think it was confusing at all. Yes different, but not confusing. I liked it though. I thought you did a great job on this.
stargal
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since 03-06-2006
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3 posted 08-21-2006 07:43 PM       View Profile for stargal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for stargal

I liked this one a lot! It was kind of like you were talking with yourself, arguing with yourself. I thought that the form in this was wonderful. The way you expressed yourself was really good.

I can sort of relate.

Thanks for sharing!

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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