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All That I Can Be

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tapper798
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0 posted 08-20-2006 02:00 PM       View Profile for tapper798   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for tapper798

Iím trying to get over youÖtrying to get over your touch,
Trying to get over everything that always meant so much.

Iím trying to forget youÖ Itís easier than to remember,
Cause then I have to think of you, and who knows all that hinders.

Iím trying to make myself see that we canít ever be that way,
You may come back but I have to know exactly what I will say.

Iíve tried so many times and Iím down left and scattered,
Itíd be so easy to go on pretending that it all never mattered.

But it did matter, even when so many things went wrong,
Thatís why I have to tough it up and learn how to be strong.

Your words and your smile have had me hypnotized,
So much that I ignored all the signs, I ignored all the lies.

Youíll never understand what all I feel for you,
And thatís the reason why I know what I have to do.

You have to see what youíre missing, see what you couldíve had,
You have to see what Iím worth, and how you gave it up for the next teenage fad.

Donít take your regrets and your broken wishes out on me,
Just because I showed you what you lost through all that I can be.

-Erin


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I just want to find my way back to you...where love is strong and feels brand new.
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cherrys_rule
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1 posted 08-20-2006 03:09 PM       View Profile for cherrys_rule   Email cherrys_rule   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherrys_rule

I actually like this one from you. Uoi did a great job on this. I hope to see more from you in the future.
rhia_5779
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2 posted 08-21-2006 07:53 AM       View Profile for rhia_5779   Email rhia_5779   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rhia_5779

this is really good, i thought it flowed really well to .
stargal
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3 posted 08-21-2006 09:26 PM       View Profile for stargal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for stargal

"Your words and your smile have had me hypnotized,
So much that I ignored all the signs, I ignored all the lies."


Been there done that^^ I loved those few lines because I can relate so well to them. In fact I loved the whole poem and it would be hard to choose, except, that these lines seemed to really stand out to me.

I also liked the flow. It seemed to just move right, like you said one word and the next just kind of rolled off your tongue. It was a very lovely sensation.

Thanks for sharing!

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
ĖSocrates
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the_girl_next_door
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4 posted 08-21-2006 11:16 PM       View Profile for the_girl_next_door   Email the_girl_next_door   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_girl_next_door

I think that some spot of the rhyming scheme are off count by a *hair* but other than that I loved this..

You always amaze me..

believe it or not.. I'm going through this.. right at this very moment.. it's very fustrating and difficult.. you wanna stay with them bc of all the good things but you covered up all the lies and bad things (like in denial) bc you didn't want to face reality and do what you knew was right. .. great job..

hope to hear more soon

~heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

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