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gozaggss
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Iím sitting at the sill,
Looking past the mill.
I see the world as it should be,
Peaceful, beautiful, from sea to sea.
Flocks of birds soaring through the sky,
While little critters do scuttle right on by.
Treetops grown into dreadlocks with time
Full of scent; lavender, roses, sagebrush and thyme.
Deserts look uninviting and hostile,
But see the lively mouse; itís actually quite docile.
But Iím not there.
It truly isnít fair
Because Iím sitting at the sill
And looking past the mill
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broken_smile1469
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hey i thought this was a great poem! a little hard to understand in some parts but thats probably just me. well i'll be looking for more by you. Great Job!!
stargal
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Hi gozaggss,

Wonderful poem! I loved the imagery in this, how you described everything in some detail. It makes for a very beautiful poem when you describe the background of the whole thing.

Yet, it's kind of sad also, because instead of being out "there" "you" are sitting at the still instead, unable to reach what you see. I have no idea what I'm talking about, forgive me...

Like I said though, wonderful poem, I really enjoyed this one

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
ĖSocrates
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