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Teen Poetry #7

sitting at the sill

gozaggss
Junior Member

since 2006-04-26

Posts 33

0 posted 2006-08-20 12:43 PM

I’m sitting at the sill,
Looking past the mill.
I see the world as it should be,
Peaceful, beautiful, from sea to sea.
Flocks of birds soaring through the sky,
While little critters do scuttle right on by.
Treetops grown into dreadlocks with time
Full of scent; lavender, roses, sagebrush and thyme.
Deserts look uninviting and hostile,
But see the lively mouse; it’s actually quite docile.
But I’m not there.
It truly isn’t fair
Because I’m sitting at the sill
And looking past the mill

broken_smile1469
Member

since 2006-07-02

Posts 104

1 posted 2006-08-20 01:59 AM

hey i thought this was a great poem! a little hard to understand in some parts but thats probably just me. well i'll be looking for more by you. Great Job!!

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-08-21 05:51 PM

Hi gozaggss,

Wonderful poem! I loved the imagery in this, how you described everything in some detail. It makes for a very beautiful poem when you describe the background of the whole thing.

Yet, it's kind of sad also, because instead of being out "there" "you" are sitting at the still instead, unable to reach what you see. I have no idea what I'm talking about, forgive me...

Like I said though, wonderful poem, I really enjoyed this one

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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