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the_girl_next_door
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0 posted 2006-08-19 08:25 PM


Helping Him

Turning up that sad song,
to drown him out of my head.
Pretending they don't hurt
(the words that he said).

Trying to hold to my pride,
one day at a time.
Like tempting lies revealed,
I followed every line.

Looking over the obvious
has never hurt this bad,
but this second time around,
makes me wish I never had.

For every scar that's healed,
another takes its place,
and the knife that cuts right through my skin
is buried in his taste.

The words are resting on his lips.
The lies, planted deep within.
His mind is filled with nothing,
but tragedy and sin.

My fairytale was broken
as soon as I turned my back,
and I found that simple pleasures
were everything I lacked.

After all the moments of deceit,
and the scars that may not heal...
I realize that pretending,
is only helping him.

By: Heather Sullivan
08-19-06

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

© Copyright 2006 Heather Sullivan - All Rights Reserved
Tempest
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1 posted 2006-08-19 08:47 PM


This was a very nice piece. It was very well written...then again your work is always well written. Good job, and keep them coming because i want to read them
                  ~Tempest~

the_girl_next_door
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2 posted 2006-08-19 09:01 PM


Thank you. It took me all day to write this.

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

broken_smile1469
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since 2006-07-02
Posts 104

3 posted 2006-08-20 01:56 AM


Great Poem! i loved it. i can realte to it and it was written great. well good job! hope to see more by you
tapper798
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4 posted 2006-08-20 02:18 PM


Um...as I read this I would read a stanza and be like "That's my favorite part" then read the next one and change my mind. Wow...I'd have to say this is one of the best written poems I've read in awhile. You did such a good job! I loved every line of it. This was definitly a breath a fresh air :]  I can't wait to see more

(adding to my library :-) )

<3Erin

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the_girl_next_door
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5 posted 2006-08-20 04:39 PM


Thank you so much.

Tapper.. I am flattered..

I've been having trouble lately getting inspiration to write. I'd be down or upset and feel like I could write but when I started I couldn't think of anything to say.. This is my latest and hopefully sometime soon i will have more..

~Always~
~Heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa
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6 posted 2006-08-22 11:16 PM


HEATHER...this is still fantastic. i keep rereading it. and i love every bit of it.

KEEP IT UP!!

love always, ker

When I'm good, I'm very good. But when I'm bad I'm better.
Mae West

hunnie_girl
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7 posted 2006-08-23 01:15 AM


After all the moments of deceit,
and the scars that may not heal...
I realize that pretending,
is only helping him.

wow just asking but can it get any better than this...? i loved this and can relate... a whole day well thanks for spending that time writing something awesome....
thanks for sharing
hunnie*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

bekahlekah45
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since 2006-03-14
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8 posted 2006-08-23 01:26 AM


yep definitely loved this one by you : )
rhia_5779
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9 posted 2006-08-23 04:43 AM


this wassssss sooooooooooo good!!!!

  i loved all of this, it is one of the better poems i have read in a  while.  deffinetly im gonna read again

the_girl_next_door
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10 posted 2006-08-23 06:30 AM


thank you so much!!

Your comments make me feel very happy.. I love to write whether or not other poeple like it but when other people say they love it.. that's awesome

~heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

stargal
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since 2006-03-06
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11 posted 2006-08-23 11:46 AM



"Turning up that sad song,
to drown him out of my head.
Pretending they don't hurt
(the words that he said)."


My favorite part^^

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
                     @-->---

rhia_5779
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since 2006-06-09
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12 posted 2006-08-23 04:40 PM


i dont have a favorite part, then i'd have to post the whole poem in here. i loved it all.  

sooooo goooooooood

nostalgic*pride
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since 2006-08-23
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NowhereVille
13 posted 2006-08-23 06:13 PM


Ooh, I like it a lot. Especially the  ending.
the_girl_next_door
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14 posted 2006-08-24 08:44 PM


Thank you all

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

toriber
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since 2010-06-10
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texas
15 posted 2010-06-10 02:40 PM


this was a really good piece and i can totally relate
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