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mgoodman1989
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0 posted 08-19-2006 02:20 PM       View Profile for mgoodman1989   Email mgoodman1989   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mgoodman1989

The look on your face
as you look in my eyes
you say you can't tell me
how your feeling inside

You say you can't tell me
that your way to shy
I feel the same way
I blush and I hide

I'm the same way
and I think the same thoughts
we'd be good together
I like you a lot

We'd be good together
I know that its true
we'll walk arm in arm
just me and you

We'll walk arm in arm
till our lips softly touch
a match made in heaven
I love you so much

© Copyright 2006 Michelle Elizabeth Goodman - All Rights Reserved
broken_smile1469
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1 posted 08-20-2006 02:06 AM       View Profile for broken_smile1469   Email broken_smile1469   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for broken_smile1469

great write! i thought it was a little bit repetitive in parts but that could just be me

but i can definently relate to this! i am very shy so it sounds like something i would write. well Great Job!
cherrys_rule
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2 posted 08-20-2006 03:11 PM       View Profile for cherrys_rule   Email cherrys_rule   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherrys_rule

yeah I can relate to this poem I like it alot. Although there were oarts that repeated themselves, but other then that Great write.
cherrys_rule
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3 posted 08-20-2006 03:11 PM       View Profile for cherrys_rule   Email cherrys_rule   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherrys_rule

yeah I can relate to this poem I like it alot. Although there were parts that repeated themselves, but other then that Great write.
mgoodman1989
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4 posted 08-20-2006 07:15 PM       View Profile for mgoodman1989   Email mgoodman1989   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mgoodman1989

Reptition, right, okay.... lol I'll work on that?

Thanks for the posts!!!

Much love,

Michelle
stargal
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5 posted 08-21-2006 05:44 PM       View Profile for stargal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for stargal

I'm afraid that I must agree with everything said above^^

Yet, even though it did repeat itself, I found that I liked the poem a lot when I ignored the repetitiveness.  I think it's a great general idea that just needs a little more polish to it, no offence.

I loved the "shy" part, it's something I can relate too, by far that would be my favorite part...

Thanks for sharing

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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the_girl_next_door
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6 posted 08-21-2006 11:28 PM       View Profile for the_girl_next_door   Email the_girl_next_door   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_girl_next_door

Very sweet and simple..

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

mgoodman1989
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7 posted 08-22-2006 03:48 PM       View Profile for mgoodman1989   Email mgoodman1989   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mgoodman1989

After another boring day, I log on to pip, reading thru the recent responses (especially stargals) I had to smile. Thanks for saying its 1 of ur favorites lol made me feel really good.

Much love,
Michelle

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