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Abiola
Junior Member
since 2006-08-09
Posts 29


0 posted 2006-08-19 01:43 AM



How is it that you are always on my mind

Even when i try to look the other way?

How is it that after all that has happen i still wanna cry,

smile, and love u

Though i still want u out of my life?

Why do i still pretend i don't have feelings for u

When u and i both know i care about u deeply?

Why does my heart keep pushing me backwards to you

When I want to move forward?

Is this a sign because I always see you

And you are in my heart?

People may say what's wrong with you, why do you still

talk to him after all that has happen?

Am i to say?

I guess i want us to start over

Or maybe i'm just stupid and making a mistake all

over again

I don't know what's going on but i know i'm so caught

up with you in my life

I wanna make this right but i don't know what to do

Honestly i see me with you but then again i can't and

won't let it happen...

I can't believe i'm thinking about u right now

Your touch, your smell, your smile, your kiss

Just every thing about you

How do i make this right?

How do i let all of this pass by?

How do i move on or am i?

How do i stop thinking about u or am i suppose to?

I just wanna know how all of this should end!!!

© Copyright 2006 abby king - All Rights Reserved
stargal
Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
1 posted 2006-08-19 07:50 PM


Hi Abiola,

Great poem! I think this one is my favorite out of anything I've seen you write so far, just because I can relate better to this one than the others...

"Why does my heart keep pushing me backwards to you
When I want to move forward?
Is this a sign because I always see you
And you are in my heart?"


My favorite part^^ The pushing backwards when you want to move forwards is a neat way of phrasing this part of the poem. I thought you did an excellent job with that...

Thanks for sharing!

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may be beautiful within."
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tapper798
Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353
My own world
2 posted 2006-08-20 02:11 PM


"Why does my heart keep pushing me backwards to you,
When I want to move forward?"


I loved that part. This poem hit a soft spot for me cause everything you described I'm going through right now. Sometimes it's hard to let go of someone, esp for me it is when I don't know if they'll hold on anyways. But yeah, I think that's the reason I liked this, it was extremely honest as to something I can totally relate to. You did an amazing job capturing that.

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Midnight_Daze
New Member
since 2007-01-08
Posts 2

3 posted 2007-01-08 04:23 PM


This is exactly how i felt/ feel with my ex. It hit home. Great job
STOP_JUDGiiN_M3
Junior Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 16

4 posted 2007-02-07 01:53 PM


HEY THIS IS HOW I FEEL EVERYDAY. I DIDN'T HAVE A FAVORITE STANZA CAUSE THEY ALL WERE SO DIFFERENT BUT UNIQUE. THANKS FOR SHARING...


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