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rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

0 posted 2006-08-16 12:09 PM

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I'm really sorry,for what I said
one of the many things I regret
I shot it out, I didn't think
please understand,that i didn't mean

any of the cruel, mean words
If I could take it back,I would
you say,whatever its nothing
but I know it is something

In a way you are punishing me
you don't yell,but I can still see
in my mind's eye,my voice,my tone
your face,look of schock,I wish I could know

a way to go back in time
never say those hateful lines
I love you, your my sister, I didn't mean to cause you pain
and if I could word by word, I would erase

all I want to say
I'll repeat it everyday
if thats what it takes
to fix my mistake

I am Sorry

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also can somebody read How do I say I am sorry? cause noone replied to that, and i wanna know what people thought of that poem.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

1 posted 2006-08-18 12:33 PM

"I'm really sorry,for what I said
one of the many things I regret
I shot it out, I didn't think
please understand,that i didn't mean

any of the cruel, mean words
If I could take it back,I would
you say,whatever its nothing
but I know it is something"

My favorite part rhia^^ It's something that everyone can relate too. It's something I can relate too.

I think you did an excellent job in voicing regret with this poem.
Not only does it take the reader back in time to when they made the same kind of mistakes, it also makes the reader feel for you and what has happened in your life.

I found this to be a very pleasurable read and I hope to see more like this one...

Also might I add it had an excellent twist on the ending, the sister part. It wasn't what I was expecting but it was done in good taste...

Thanks for sharing!

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

2 posted 2006-08-24 08:43 PM

I love the ending to this.. It was really good.

Keep it up..

~heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

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