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Tempest
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0 posted 08-16-2006 10:07 AM       View Profile for Tempest   Email Tempest   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Tempest

Stand in the face of fear to learn what you already know
Tempting dreams are the reason twisted destruction sows
The raw pressure builds as you lay waste to your youth
Never knowing that the irredescent tempting love tells no truth

The colors shine through
Presenting a false security
Its too stong to overcome  
So you fall victom in unsurity

They sense your feeling of deprestion
And they know that they have won
Can you feel thier hunger
It grows with the fading sun

All you have to do
Is stand
Stand with me
Ill lead you to be free
I am the arch angel, pure and faithful to my death
Follow me
I shall give you your undying breath

Stand in the face of fear to learn what you already know
Tempting dreams are the reason twisted destruction sows
© Copyright 2006 Bryan Girton - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 08-16-2006 01:12 PM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

wow i liked this poem,

Never knowing that the irredescent tempting love tells no truth

this was my favorite line........good write
Krysti*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

stargal
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2 posted 08-17-2006 01:22 PM       View Profile for stargal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for stargal

"Stand in the face of fear to learn what you already know"

My favorite parts^^ I like how you went back and put it not only at the start but also the ending. When you put it at the ending too it sort of rounded the whole poem off, made it appear more complete, at least in my eyes.

I know that this isn't one of my favorites by you but I did like the msgs in this. Plus the use of an "arch angel", I thought that was cool...

Great job with this and thanks for sharing

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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mgoodman1989
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3 posted 08-21-2006 05:17 PM       View Profile for mgoodman1989   Email mgoodman1989   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mgoodman1989

"The colors shine through
Presenting a false security
Its too stong to overcome  
So you fall victom in unsurity"

This stanza stands out the most to me. It has a really strong meaning and I like it. I love this poem by you, but, like stargal this isn't my favorite.

Keep writing, I love reading your stuff.

Much love,

Michelle
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4 posted 08-21-2006 11:33 PM       View Profile for the_girl_next_door   Email the_girl_next_door   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_girl_next_door

I love how you ended it the same way you started it..

Great great job..

~heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

 
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