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Abiola
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since 2006-08-09
Posts 29


0 posted 2006-08-14 07:15 PM



I OPEN THE DOOR 2 A NEW BEGININNG
TO SEE WHAT IS LYIN BE4 MY EYES
IS IT A WORLD OF GOOD, PASSIONATE, LOVE OF JUST UN-JOY?
I GUESS IT'S GOOD BECAUSE I FOUND U

FROM THE DAY I LED EYES ON U
MY WORLD TURN 2 A NEW BEGINNING
MY WHOLE BODY FELT THAT INTERNAL RUST
A FEELIN I NEVER FELT ONCE BE4
A GREAT FEELIN I MUST ADMIT

THE WAY WE CONNECT IS SO BEAUTIFUL
THE UNCONDITION CARE WE HAVE FOR ONE OTHER IS SO SWEET
NO ONE CAN SHARE WHAT WE HAVE B/C IT'S U AND ME
I WILL NEVER FORGET WHO U R
THE THINGS U DO 4 ME WILL I EVER TOP IT?
UR AMAZING I MUST SAY
AND I REALLY LIKE THAT

HOW DID I FIND AN LOVING ,SMART, CARING AND HONEST PERSON LIKE U
DID THE MAN UP STAIRS SEND U 2 ME?
I DON'T KNOW BUT I HOPE U R A KEY 2 MY HEART
I HOPE U WILL BE THE ONE TO KEEP THE SMILE ON MY FACE AND KEEP ME HAPPY

I DON'T WANT 2 LOSE A PERSON LIKE U
I REALLY DON'T BECAUSE U JUST BRIGHTEN UP MY DAY EVERY TIME I SEE OR HEAR FROM U

WILL THESES FEELINGS EVER CHANGE?
WILL U LIE 2 ME?
WILL U BREAK MY HEART?
WILL U TREAT ME BAD?
IS IT ANYTHING I HAVE 2 WORRY ABOUT??
LET ME KNOW

WELL I GOTTA SAY
I LO LO LO LO LOVE U
WELL I THINK SO I'M NOT SURE
OR MAYBE IT'S IN-FASCINATION
I DON'T KNOW, I'M YOUNG U KNOW ONLy 16
GOTTA LEARN THESE THINGS

JUST HOPE I'M GOIN IN THE RIGHT DIRECTIONS
NO MISTAKES I HOPE


(wait a minute was this a dream???, let a sista know)

Abiola Adekahunsi


© Copyright 2006 abby king - All Rights Reserved
Fuschia
Junior Member
since 2006-06-19
Posts 35
England
1 posted 2006-08-16 02:56 PM


I really liked this poem. I can relate to it all so well at the moment, being almost sixteen and feeling exactly the same. It was well written. However, it would be good if you could write it out fully. Not in text language!

WELL I GOTTA SAY
I LO LO LO LO LOVE U
WELL I THINK SO I'M NOT SURE
OR MAYBE IT'S IN-FASCINATION
I DON'T KNOW, I'M YOUNG U KNOW ONLy 16
GOTTA LEARN THESE THINGS

And if you love someone that much then age doesn't matter.There is always things to learn at every age. I'm sure your going in the right direction.

THE WAY WE CONNECT IS SO BEAUTIFUL
THE UNCONDITION CARE WE HAVE FOR ONE OTHER IS SO SWEET
NO ONE CAN SHARE WHAT WE HAVE B/C IT'S U AND ME
I WILL NEVER FORGET WHO U R
THE THINGS U DO 4 ME WILL I EVER TOP IT?
UR AMAZING I MUST SAY
AND I REALLY LIKE THAT

I loved this stanza best!

xxFuschiaxx


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