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Teen Poetry #7

Forgotten Like A Sweater

Tempest
Member

since 2006-04-28

Posts 247
dont eat paint chips!!!!

0 posted 2006-08-13 09:11 AM

Forgotten like a sweater
Thrown to the side
Never to be seen again
But ill stand the test of time

Go on with your life
Love your fake friends
I guess we'll see
Who would have loved you till the end

I cant change your mind
Its really all your choice
You chose to turn away
And forget about my voice

So just go on hiding behind
The one who really doesnt care
I tryed to be the one
You turned to in despair

Just know I tryed to save you
Before it was too late
I put my heart in trying
To give you some faith
Because what you dont know is
Your never second rate

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

1 posted 2006-08-13 06:30 PM

"Forgotten like a sweater
Thrown to the side
Never to be seen again
But ill stand the test of time"

My favorite stanza^^ Yet, this stanza is also sad in some ways, sad that sometimes the people you love the best can't see how much you really care or that you will be there for them... I liked the comparison to the sweater, I thought it made the poem a little more unique in some ways. It adds ... class(?) to the poem.

Great job with this one, I can't wait to read more

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
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hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

2 posted 2006-08-16 05:33 PM

So just go on hiding behind
The one who really doesnt care
I tryed to be the one
You turned to in despair.

i liked this stanza...well along with all your other poems:P but i thought this had a really nice flow
Krysti*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

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