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bekahlekah45
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0 posted 08-11-2006 01:11 AM       View Profile for bekahlekah45   Email bekahlekah45   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bekahlekah45

Forgiveness.
So hard to understand.
Forgetting somone's mistakes
So hard to do.

How could anyone ever forgive me
For the horrible things i've done
how could they forget my mistakes
It just doesnt seem possible

I want to be trusted
Taken seriously.
But if i keep making these mistakes
How will that happen?

I can only pray I'll get better
And stop doing these stupid deeds
Stop worrying about my self
But about everyone elses needs...


yeah ummm i know this is worse my other bad one but its my thoughts at the present moment. i couldnt sleep so i thought i'd write a poem. anyways...uhh yeh.

[This message has been edited by bekahlekah45 (08-12-2006 01:40 AM).]

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1 posted 08-11-2006 11:01 AM       View Profile for rhia_5779   Email rhia_5779   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rhia_5779

Forgiveness.
So hard to understand.
Forgetting somone's mistakes
So hard to do.

i loved that stanza, i think it just opens up the poem and says it all its perfect. i loved that stanza
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2 posted 08-11-2006 05:09 PM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

I can only pray I'll get better
And stop doing these stupid deeds
Stop worrying about my self
But about everyone elses needs...

wow thins was a great ending....
Krysti*

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heart.

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3 posted 08-11-2006 08:20 PM       View Profile for cherrys_rule   Email cherrys_rule   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherrys_rule

Forgiveness.
So hard to understand.
Forgetting somone's mistakes
So hard to do.

How could anyone ever forgive me
For the horrible things i've done
how could they forget my mistakes
It just doesnt seem possible


I like these two parts. It's really deep.
And it really explains me. I like poems that I can relate to. so Nice job. i hope to see more in the future.

~if I speak of love and it wishes, as I squeeze my eyes shut, does your heart also break?~
bekahlekah45
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4 posted 08-11-2006 10:41 PM       View Profile for bekahlekah45   Email bekahlekah45   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bekahlekah45

thanks guys : )

can anyone help me with a name for it???
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5 posted 08-12-2006 01:26 AM       View Profile for stargal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for stargal

Mmm… Well, knowing me this will be a terrible name but I was thinking just “Forgiveness” as the title… I don't know though, it's really authors choice...

As much as I enjoyed this whole poem together, I did have a favorite stanza which would have to be this one,

"I want to be trusted
Taken seriously.
But if i keep making these mistakes
How will that happen?"


This one just really jumps out at me... It's something I can relate too, something I almost feel like I said! lol

Great write on this one
It was such a pleasure to read

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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yvetters_24
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6 posted 08-27-2006 04:26 AM       View Profile for yvetters_24   Email yvetters_24   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for yvetters_24

this is really kwel i like it and i can relate at times keep writing dude sounds best when its only ur tru thoughts
bekahlekah45
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7 posted 08-27-2006 12:56 PM       View Profile for bekahlekah45   Email bekahlekah45   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bekahlekah45

thanks : )

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8 posted 09-03-2006 09:08 PM       View Profile for *Alli4000*   Email *Alli4000*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Alli4000*

To me, the first stanza jumped out the most.  Overall, a nice write by you! Thanks for sharing.

~Alli~
bekahlekah45
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9 posted 09-05-2006 04:47 PM       View Profile for bekahlekah45   Email bekahlekah45   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bekahlekah45

ty!
 
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