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bekahlekah45
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since 2006-03-14

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0 posted 2006-08-11 01:11 AM

Forgiveness.
So hard to understand.
Forgetting somone's mistakes
So hard to do.

How could anyone ever forgive me
For the horrible things i've done
how could they forget my mistakes
It just doesnt seem possible

I want to be trusted
Taken seriously.
But if i keep making these mistakes
How will that happen?

I can only pray I'll get better
And stop doing these stupid deeds
Stop worrying about my self
But about everyone elses needs...

yeah ummm i know this is worse my other bad one but its my thoughts at the present moment. i couldnt sleep so i thought i'd write a poem. anyways...uhh yeh.

[This message has been edited by bekahlekah45 (08-12-2006 01:40 AM).]

rhia_5779
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since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

1 posted 2006-08-11 11:01 AM

Forgiveness.
So hard to understand.
Forgetting somone's mistakes
So hard to do.

i loved that stanza, i think it just opens up the poem and says it all its perfect. i loved that stanza

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
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2 posted 2006-08-11 05:09 PM

I can only pray I'll get better
And stop doing these stupid deeds
Stop worrying about my self
But about everyone elses needs...

wow thins was a great ending....
Krysti*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

cherrys_rule
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since 2006-03-18

Posts 442

3 posted 2006-08-11 08:20 PM

Forgiveness.
So hard to understand.
Forgetting somone's mistakes
So hard to do.

How could anyone ever forgive me
For the horrible things i've done
how could they forget my mistakes
It just doesnt seem possible

I like these two parts. It's really deep.
And it really explains me. I like poems that I can relate to. so Nice job. i hope to see more in the future.

~if I speak of love and it wishes, as I squeeze my eyes shut, does your heart also break?~

bekahlekah45
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since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

4 posted 2006-08-11 10:41 PM

thanks guys : )

can anyone help me with a name for it???

stargal
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since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
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5 posted 2006-08-12 01:26 AM

Mmm… Well, knowing me this will be a terrible name but I was thinking just “Forgiveness” as the title… I don't know though, it's really authors choice...

As much as I enjoyed this whole poem together, I did have a favorite stanza which would have to be this one,

"I want to be trusted
Taken seriously.
But if i keep making these mistakes
How will that happen?"

This one just really jumps out at me... It's something I can relate too, something I almost feel like I said! lol

Great write on this one
It was such a pleasure to read

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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yvetters_24
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since 2006-08-27

Posts 52
california

6 posted 2006-08-27 04:26 AM

this is really kwel i like it and i can relate at times keep writing dude sounds best when its only ur tru thoughts

bekahlekah45
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since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

7 posted 2006-08-27 12:56 PM

thanks : )

*Alli4000*

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8 posted 2006-09-03 09:08 PM

To me, the first stanza jumped out the most. Overall, a nice write by you! Thanks for sharing.

~Alli~

bekahlekah45
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since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

9 posted 2006-09-05 04:47 PM

ty!

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