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People; Life; Uncle

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stargal
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0 posted 08-05-2006 02:03 AM       View Profile for stargal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for stargal

This is so not my usual style of writing, so, if it's horrible be honest about it cause I'm testing(?) new things and I would like to know.  Thanks    

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Brain; think upon abhorrent past
I with a crystal glass; raised
With a mocking toast to life; unfair
I boast with pride; my anger at people and life

People; for planting the seed of destruction in one man
With hurting words; feeding, off the fear of painful death
Offering; “sweet” suicide as the way to timeless release
Gun, knife, rope, pipe, it’s all the same, it’ll make you forget your pain…

Life; For stealing my uncle away so soon
Horrid life takes it all; forcing, pushing, raping
Pulling; rhythm, breath, beat, memories, all, into The Sea
The Sea of souls; where life has extracted its ultimate toll; death…

Uncle; didn’t you know we loved you so
Couldn’t you see; 10 years; your death still haunts me
Must I blame; the world for your shameful disgrace
Wretched; am I; hurting, with knowledge, of absolute dread…

People; will hunt me down; in search of the feed
Life; will come for me in time; with an ardor; for the toll
Uncle; constant reminder to me; of a useless tragedy
Life; people; uncle;
                         will,
                                never,
                                        be,
                                             me…



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bekahlekah45
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1 posted 08-05-2006 11:03 AM       View Profile for bekahlekah45   Email bekahlekah45   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bekahlekah45

woah.
thats really really good.  at least i think it is. It was extremely different form but i love it.  It was really cool how it all came together.  and yeah.  amazing

i really enjoyed this alot
thanks for sharing!
the_girl_next_door
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2 posted 08-05-2006 06:26 PM       View Profile for the_girl_next_door   Email the_girl_next_door   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_girl_next_door

Stargal,

I find this very interesting. I love the way you set it up. You're other poems are good but this blew them out of the water. Awesome poem.


~Heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

bekahlekah45
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3 posted 08-06-2006 11:32 PM       View Profile for bekahlekah45   Email bekahlekah45   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bekahlekah45

boosting...
stargal
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4 posted 08-06-2006 11:40 PM       View Profile for stargal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for stargal

Eh, thanks for the boost bekah and for the comment(s) and being a friend and being there and listening and … everything? It’s appreciated…

Also thank you Heather I'm glad you liked this poem. I always enjoy seeing what you've got to say about my work...

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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silentmage13
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5 posted 08-28-2006 05:38 PM       View Profile for silentmage13   Email silentmage13   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for silentmage13

More and more, you become one of my favorite poets. This is a great piece.

Hope can only be found inside yourself, never in a person or thing.

The Shadow in Blue
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since 05-18-2006
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6 posted 09-01-2006 06:52 PM       View Profile for The Shadow in Blue   Email The Shadow in Blue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit The Shadow in Blue's Home Page   View IP for The Shadow in Blue

I like this style for you. It suits you well. One of my favorites of yours. Thanks for sharing your poetry Stargirl.

*tips hat*

^_^

J. Slamka
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7 posted 09-01-2006 09:45 PM       View Profile for *Alli4000*   Email *Alli4000*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Alli4000*

Agreed. This style does suit you well.  I really enjoyed this one.

~Alli~
mgoodman1989
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8 posted 09-03-2006 12:34 PM       View Profile for mgoodman1989   Email mgoodman1989   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mgoodman1989

Magical, LOL this looks great on you! Keep it up, I am anticipating more!!!

Seriously, good Job, I really liked the flow, the wording, and the set up. Different, and refreshing.

Much love,
Michelle
mgoodman1989
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9 posted 09-04-2006 05:01 PM       View Profile for mgoodman1989   Email mgoodman1989   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mgoodman1989

Boosting
mgoodman1989
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10 posted 09-04-2006 05:01 PM       View Profile for mgoodman1989   Email mgoodman1989   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mgoodman1989

Boosting

*I love him oh yes I do, he's for me and not for you, and if by chance you take my place, I'll take my fist and smash your face!*

stargal
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11 posted 09-04-2006 05:33 PM       View Profile for stargal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for stargal

LOL! Thanks for the comments everyone, and the boost mgoodman

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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