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synthetic
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since 2006-06-10
Posts 70
ontario, canada

0 posted 2006-08-03 10:42 PM


To me

I’ve written and written
Still there’s something missing
Pain, anger, hate-I’ve rid myself of the above
But I just can’t really explain my love
This time I’m really trying to explain how I feel
No lies, fake compliments-it’s all for real
We’re changing, I’m changing
I’m going through a transformation
One that I don’t completely understand
But I don’t worry because I know you got my hand
Already these few lines
Feels like I’ve emptied my mind
But I know that my heart still has something to say
And I just need to find that special way
To express my love and it’s depth
And the incredible feeling I get with every single breath
My mother, father, my brothers I love them to death
It’s weird to say, but now I place you above them and the rest
Usually I think then write-but now I write then think
So hopefully from mine to yours I can make a link
I truly believe that between us there’s a bond
One that’ll make us go back and beyond
As I’m writing I realize that I can’t really explain
My love for you, writing these words is sort of in vain
What they mean to me, might not be the same for you
I write like I’m forced to, but really I choose
Because the comfort it brings me is so unreal
Makes me grasp the concept of how much you mean
Everything in this world to me


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stargal
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since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
1 posted 2006-08-04 04:03 PM


Wow... I'm ... speechless! I loved this poem, all of it, no favorite spots, nothing. It's all amazing to me, all relatable for me. I can't even put into words how much I like this poem. I'm astounded by how wonderful I felt this poem to be; you are one awesome writer. This poem is going into my library as of now.  

Thank you so much for sharing, I can’t wait to read more poems by you

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the_girl_next_door
Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591
USA
2 posted 2006-08-05 06:07 PM


Wonderful poem.. one of your best that I've read.. GREAT JOB

~heather

ps-going in my library

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

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