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bekahlekah45
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0 posted 2006-08-03 01:27 PM


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stargal
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1 posted 2006-08-03 04:24 PM


Hmm… not meaning to diss your poem or anything, but I’ve never understood how we can describe children as “innocent”. For are they not already sinners no matter the age, is it not our sin nature that makes us not want to share toys, to hit people, to throw fits, do we describe them as innocent because it’s a different kind of sin from the “grownups”? I don’t know…

I liked the general background of where you are coming from in the poem though, I can see where we would consider children innocent, more innocent (?), than we are. I’m not sure if I would consider this one of your best poems but it was certainly one that made me start thinking with my slow little mind again! Lol

Thanks for sharing! You’ve given me a lot to contemplate at the moment.  

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bekahlekah45
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2 posted 2006-08-03 05:11 PM


Nah i just mean..like not innocent as in ahh its so hard to desrcibe.  like kids dont hafta worry about such huge things...where like not innocent that they do do wrong, but that their minds are filled with all the crap that goes on in the world, they don't worry about huge things because they don't know about the huge things...i guess ignorant is a better word.  they're ignorant to the world around them...i guess does that make any more sense?
bekahlekah45
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3 posted 2006-08-03 06:02 PM


and no it didnt offend me one bit : )

I'm not easily offended haha

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