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pen&paper
Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513


0 posted 2006-08-02 05:38 PM



the whole “invisibility thing”…
Yeah
I’m done with it
I’m someone
I should be recognized as someone
not as a target
for abuse
for slander
so that other people feel better
about themselves
I will be recogized as a person
whose morals are good
but does what she wants
not always what she should
I’m just a girl
just someone
who likes to be seen
as someone
who understands who they are
and where they stand
I don’t want to be
what they call cool
I want to be me and-
Ya know what?-
maybe do well in school
if they don’t like that
if they think it’s uncool
I really don’t care
let them be the fool
they can have
their hoochie tops
hidden beer cans
and energy soda pops
and I’ll have
my individuality
my artistry
and what makes me “me”
Live with it!
I don’t want to be anybody else
Stop trying to make me “you”
and let me be “me”
  

© Copyright 2006 Cierra L. Robbeloth - All Rights Reserved
bekahlekah45
Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533

1 posted 2006-08-02 09:47 PM


umm idk how to comment this except that i LOVE it.  its amazing.  and i love the passion in it and the reality of it and how i can relate- and probably many others can too.  
i think this is amazing and it goin in my library.
awesome job i wouldnt change a thing

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591
USA
2 posted 2006-08-02 11:20 PM


I agree, I wouldn't change anything. I really liked how you started and finished the poem. It was great. I wish that more people saw it this way but these days people, especially teens, just wanna try to make it in society and fit it but really the real world hasn't even hit them yet. Great message here. I loved it.

~heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

stargal
Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
3 posted 2006-08-03 01:16 AM



One word; Amazing!

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