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cherrys_rule
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since 2006-03-18
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0 posted 2006-08-01 08:27 PM



As you rest your hand upon my knee.
I knew then, this is something that must remain.
At that moment I knew then we belong.
All I can say to my broken heart is SO LONG!!!

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stargal
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since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
1 posted 2006-08-02 01:44 AM


Aww, what a cute poem! I loved the ending, it was a neat thing to see. Plus putting the words in capitals adds so much to the poem! Just helps it read bold and bright? I don't know what I'm talking about, it's late... It was a pleasurable read and a good write on your part

Thanks for sharing though

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John O'Driscoll
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since 2006-03-13
Posts 43
Sandy, Utah
2 posted 2006-08-02 01:33 PM


LOVED IT!

it was short and sweet and to the point. way cool
John O.

True happiness is found after you think you have irretrievably lost it

cherrys_rule
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since 2006-03-18
Posts 442

3 posted 2006-08-02 09:51 PM


thanks you two, I like this one myself.
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