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half of my heart (belongs to you)

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electricxheart
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far away from home.


0 posted 07-30-2006 11:44 PM       View Profile for electricxheart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for electricxheart


but you wouldnít know what itís like
to have this lust bottled
inside
while you sit and hide away
in another world
in another life
and we are always separated
because i canít read your thoughts like
i used to
dreaming, dreaming, dreaming
that we could build a foundation
stronger then what we shared
itís not getting us anywhere
never got us
what we always admired
what we always imagined we could be
wrapped within these nights
like we knew
like we knew all along
when we had no clue
nothing
to keep us wondering
nothing
to keep our faith alive,
our love wilting
into the summer heat
into the summer memories
when you swept me off my feet
just like that
just like that
oh, and i believed you when you said
hang on just a little longer
youíre stronger then this
youíre stronger

but iím so weak in the knees
breathing
for you
has never kept me alive
and the lies
they only serve to make me want to
break the ties
away from your grip
away from those eyes
that always seemed to rip apart my
insides,
did you know how i used to cry?
did you know that i never stopped wondering why?

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Acies
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1 posted 07-31-2006 12:26 PM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

I haven't been around for a while, but this is an exceptional way of starting my piptalk days again.
thanks for sharing your thoughts and feelings
patience_iago
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2 posted 09-03-2006 08:30 PM       View Profile for patience_iago   Email patience_iago   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for patience_iago

Why didnt more people comment on this? Its great. I love it, espically the title, it is very attention grabbing.

"There are some days where i believe i might die of an overdose of satisfaction"
-Dali

*Alli4000*
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3 posted 09-03-2006 09:03 PM       View Profile for *Alli4000*   Email *Alli4000*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Alli4000*

Agreed.  The title is excellent and it was just a great write from you!

~Alli~
fearing-laughter
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land of cheese (Wisconsin)


4 posted 09-10-2006 05:16 AM       View Profile for fearing-laughter   Email fearing-laughter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fearing-laughter

this is amazing.

i have had writers block for god knows how long now, but i know that if i could write i would wish it to be this.  

thanks for sharing

bergundy

At least we're still friends! At least we're still alive!--Alkaline Trio

the_girl_next_door
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5 posted 11-08-2006 10:08 PM       View Profile for the_girl_next_door   Email the_girl_next_door   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_girl_next_door

Wow.. I absolutley loved this. I don't have time now to analyze and critique this.. but I just wanted to say wonderful job.. this was very deep. I loved the repetition of some of the lines. .great job..

~heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

 
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