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WaterFairy103
Member

since 2006-05-31

Posts 196

0 posted 2006-07-28 08:42 PM

Yeah, you probably think you’re somethin’,
Wearing clothes that show way too much skin.
With those long, long legs, and that short, short skirt,
One bat of those eyes, you turn into one big flirt.
When you made a move for him I couldn’t believe it,
OK, I didn’t think you had the guts, I admit.
But let me tell you somethin disappointing, hun.
Cut it out, because trust me, you’re done.

Because for you, he won’t even turn his head,
He’ll smile gently at you instead.
Then he’ll quietly take you aside,
He won’t’ want to hurt your pride.
He’ll say, “I’m already devoted to one girl,”
And that’s why he won’t give you a whirl.
And you can scream and kick and throw a fit,
But it won’t bother him one bit.

Now, HE’S too polite to call you a slut,
But I am SO not above kicking your butt.
I probably got you by a good twenty pounds,
I figure I could take you a couple rounds.
You don’t still want to fight, do you, sweetheart?
Nah, I figured you were too smart.
You wanna want someone? With me, that’s fine.
But keep your hands off him, he’s MINE!!

When I stopped trying to find the right guy, and concentrated on being the right girl, the right guy found me.

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

1 posted 2006-07-28 10:23 PM

thats good, i like it, it flowed well, and its kinda funny and its really amazing

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-07-29 12:02 PM

Aww! It's a sweet/funny poem to me, I love that kind! I thought the flow was amazing, it kind of went from one kind of flow to another, but they flowed so well together it was fine, ya know?

"Because for you, he won’t even turn his head,
He’ll smile gently at you instead.
Then he’ll quietly take you aside,
He won’t’ want to hurt your pride.
He’ll say, “I’m already devoted to one girl,”
And that’s why he won’t give you a whirl.
And you can scream and kick and throw a fit,
But it won’t bother him one bit."

I liked this part a lot, the reason being is it shows the guy as being a... dare I say, gentleman? Nice enough to speak up and say he's taken, nice enough to do it nicely? lolz, confusing. It's kind of wishful thinking on a lot of our parts to find a guy like this, i'm glad you did?

Thanks a bunch for sharing, i loved this poem

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the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

3 posted 2006-07-29 05:24 PM

I agree with stargal. ..

I also really love the part when you say he won't call her a slut but you're not above kicking her butt lol.. that was funny..

Great job.. I love cute poems like this..

~heather`

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

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