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rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

0 posted 2006-07-28 08:00 PM

I wish that I could thank you
For all that you have ever done
Wish I could give what’s due
Brought me back, when I tried to run

Comforted me, all the times I cried
Wet and broken tears
There for me, when I hurt bad inside
Got rid of all my fears

To me you have been
Way better than ever have I deserved
Truthfully, a true friend
Got me to talk, no matter how reserved

That I have tried to be
When I tried to pull away
Opened my eyes to see
Past, future, light of each day

There are no words that I could ever utter
That could ever make up what I might have said
It was likely you I hurt the most, in my clutter
Not meaning to, you never laughed at tears I shed

I probably made you mad
But, You stood by me true
And never could I ask
For a better friend than you

WaterFairy103
Member

since 2006-05-31

Posts 196

1 posted 2006-07-28 09:23 PM

WOW!! I love this, the emotion is very relatable! You're lucky to have such a good friend, and to have such amazing talent! Good job!

When I stopped trying to find the right guy, and concentrated on being the right girl, the right guy found me.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-07-29 12:07 PM

It sounds like you have one awesome friend there! Yet, don't cut yourself short, I'm sure you do the same things for them... I think it's a two way street, you both have excellent friends in each other.

Anyway, I liked the poem, but I didn't feel it had the same kind of qualities as some of your other poems, no offence. The flow and things were kind of so-so to me. That could just be me too. Although, what I would suggest is you reading this allowed to yourself a couple times, see if you notice it. If not i'm sure that it is just me.

"I wish that I could thank you
For all that you have ever done
Wish I could give what’s due
Brought me back, when I tried to run"

This part was my favorite, because I can relate so well to it. I have a friend that is like the friend in this and I've never been able to thank her enough for everything she's done. I never will be able too but I'm sure going to try...

Thanks a bunch for sharing!

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tapper798
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 353
My own world

3 posted 2006-08-03 11:21 PM

aww this is sweet. i love your rhyming. it didn't seem forced at all! keep it up!

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I just want to find my way back to you...where love is strong and feels brand new.

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