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synthetic
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since 2006-06-10
Posts 70
ontario, canada

0 posted 2006-07-23 09:15 PM


No real love around me
simply infatuation and urges for pleasure
so I write to feel wanted
I write to feel there
once upon a time I'd use my efforts to write for her
long ago like it was just before yesterday
however now she's gone
gone because she's moved on
moved on because she saw nothing here for her
so there's no real love for me
simply old tall tales to remember
that end with me wanting to forget
... and I write
still young with an aged soul
struggling to keep pace with a wise mind
tarnished with a flacid heart
but it'll be ok
... as long as I write
my words fill my voids
leaving me artificially satiated
until the echo of my words fade
along with my health
along with my breath
then I lose myself
my identity, my sorrows, my joys
in between letters, proses, stanzas
out of my dreams
under the stars I'll never reach
above those gone due to a broken heart
the mirror catches my reflection.
I rise from my pained moments, pen in hand
a brand new outlook, solely for you
the one I haven't found
the one to which I'm forever bound
my weakness, my strength, my gift, my love


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the_girl_next_door
Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591
USA
1 posted 2006-07-23 11:26 PM


I can relate to this so much.. especially the first half.. this was very deep and full of emotions. It carried of a sense of melancholy-hope(if that makes any sense at all to you?) but truly a wonderful poem I loved it.

~heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

cherrys_rule
Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442

2 posted 2006-07-25 08:42 PM


I have to agree. This has to deal with so much in my life. This poem is really good, I hope to see more from you.
stargal
Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
3 posted 2006-07-26 12:51 PM


"No real love around me
simply infatuation and urges for pleasure
so I write to feel wanted
I write to feel there"


I enjoyed this part of the poem a lot, for some reason this particular spot stuck out to me most. Maybe, because there is so much truthfulness in so little lines... Or, because I can relate so well to all of the lines! Especially the writing, writing to feel wanted. That's something I can understand...

This poem was amazing to me. I like how you can use words that are not hard to understand but make the poem appear complex. Make it so it keeps a readers interest. I think you are very talented in that respect...

Thanks a bunch for sharing

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