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punkrockerrobin 
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV 
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what my heart once knew now has lost disaapeared into the cold deep frost.... the world to me is now unknown i sit in the cold waiting to return the world i knew is now unseen i close my eyes trying to remember mummbled words come to mind as i try to find my way back home cold and alone i see the way i walk and i walk for days unknown as i get closer it seems farther farther to get home i walk this road alone hoping to return i open my eyes and then i realize i was never alone i was always home hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and men! |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
ok so basically it's just a bunch of mumbled words put in to a poem not ment to make sense at all. enjoy! hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and men! |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
I’m not sure what you meant by “basically it’s just a bunch of mumbled words put in to a poem not ment to make sense at all” because for me this made since! I’ve had this… experience before? In a different way I’m sure, but I felt like I was alone and yet I wasn’t? Confusing! I loved the ending on this though, it wasn’t what I was expecting, which is cool. I like surprise endings like this, in fact the whole time I read this I didn’t really know where it was going to go. Yet, I felt like you wrapped this whole thing up and made it fit just right… It was nicely done on your part. Thanks so much for sharing!  @-->--- |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
awww thanks glad you made sense of it. it jsut took me afew of reading it over and over to really get my own writing lol! hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and men! |
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cherrys_rule Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442 |
I agree with stargirl... I've also been down that path. I also agree that this wasn't mumble jumble words either. Your poem actually makes sence. |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
thank you hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and men! |
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kin3tix Junior Member
since 2006-07-05
Posts 17Somewhere wondering... |
Nicely written, almost seems like a story untold  |
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