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cherrys_rule Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442 |
I can't tell if you're laughing Between each smile, there's a tear in your eye. THere's a train leaving town in an hour. It's not waiting for you, and neither am I! I don't care if we lose it all tonight. Up in flames, burning bright. Warming the air of the world This place rings w/ echoes of lives once lived, but now are lost. Time spent wondering about tomarrow I have no more blood to bleed, b/c my heart has been draining into the sea. I thought we had everything, But as I now see... we had NOTHING! ~Trapped in this thing called life~ |
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cherrys_rule Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442 |
I'd like to know what you guys think. When i was writing this. I was listening to some songs and some of the lyrics just hit me, And now I came up with this. ~Trapped in this thing called life~ |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Well, I liked it... Though, when I first read it, it was a little confusing, I think it takes a few reads before you are able to understand the whole poem. I'm not sure if I can see it in song form, but I'm not that talented with music n stuff, so it's up to those that are to offer their opinions on this... The mention of the train was one of my favorite parts, or the burning and flames too. Those made the poem really interesting, made it captivating for the reader... Thanks for sharing  @-->--- |
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