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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent 
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I've already seen you now what are you gonna do? It's time to end this lie this time I'm not even gonna cry. The sunset is red like fire you are no longer my desire. Just yesterday you were running your fingers through my hair, now you are cuddling with her in you underweear. That was something we used to do but now I am through with you. SENIOR 06' aol sn- tearsoflove13762 [This message has been edited by tearsoflove13762 (06-22-2006 01:14 AM).] |
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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent |
wow guys be nice to me! i havent written in forever! just tell me what you think SENIOR 06' |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
so this was about a boyfriend who left you for another girl i take it? yeah been there.. Good write. Its not one of my favorites but i dont hate it. so yeah keep writing i hope to see more from ya |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
I liked it actually, maybe because I also can relate to it, been there, done that sort of thing… takes awhile to get over, but afterwards you just got to smile wondering why you were with such a creep! Anyway, I thought this was a good write by you. The last line in the fourth stanza though needs a little bit of attention, spelling wise. Just that one word and “you”, I think you meant “your”, you might want to change that… I’m glad to see your still posting though! I hope you will continue to do so, since I’ve always enjoyed reading your poems  @-->--- |
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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent |
ha ha ha thanks im so out of it! i spent 6 hours straight today in the pool and i am fried i am white ... usually now im lookin like a strawberry and i am misspelling everything today! |
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cherrys_rule Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442 |
yeah i can relate to that right now. My ex was caught by one of my friends at a party, and told me that he was cheating on me with his ex/ g/f. The next day I played w/ his mind thinking that everything was fine. And after that day I knew he wasn't gonna come out with the truth, so I broke it off. I didn't mind losing what we had, b/c we were only dating for a while. But the hard thing was that I also lost my best friend aswell. |
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