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PUNISHMENT?
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PUNISHMENT? |
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BlackEyedBueaty07 Junior Member
since 2006-04-05
Posts 27rittman, ohio |
UNTITLED LOOKING AT MY LIFE MY PAST, AND WHAT MAY COME IN MY FUTURE ITS A PAIN TO THINK I WONT MAKE IT THROUGH THIS LIFE THROUGH THE TEARS THAT I CRY I THINK ABOUT ALL OF MY MISTAKES IVE MADE ITS LIKE ALL MY PAIN IS THE CONSEQUENCE OF MY MISTAKES IS THIS MY PUNISHMENT? IT SEEMS THAT THE MORE I MAKE MISTAKES THE MORE THE PUNISHMENT GETS WORSE THE PAIN GETS MORE TENSE YOU DONT EVEN UNDERSTAND WHAT IVE GONE THROUGH PEOPLE DIENG THE DEPRESSING STAGE CRYING AND LIEING WONDERING IF ILL BE DEAD BEFORE I CAN ACTUALLY LIVE LIFE THE WAY I WANT TO WHAT TO DO? IS THIS MY PUNISHMENT FOR ALL THE BAD THINGS I DO? BECAUSE IF IT IS, IS THERE A DIFFERENT WAY TO MAKE IT UP TO YOU? OR IS THIS THE ONLY WAY YOU SEE MY PUNISHMENT GOES THROUGH? |
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Frank W. Torres Member
since 2006-06-10
Posts 133 |
Interesting. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Well, I found it to be a little bit confusing for me… The part where you say, “it’s a pain to think I won’t make it through this life”, I don’t really understand that. Maybe just the way it is phrased is confusing for me. Cause I believe if it was phrased more like “it’s a pain to think I won’t make it through the rest of my life”, but I don’t know. Maybe you could explain what you are really trying to say in that line? I also don’t really understand why you put this in caps? Is there some reason for that? I liked the general idea of this poem a lot the questions in it are ones I myself can relate too… and I loved the ending, for me that was one of the best parts in the whole poem! Really awesome there… Thanks for sharing again, I can’t wait to see another poem by you  @-->--- |
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cherrys_rule Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442 |
I liked it. I thought it was also interesting, but in a good way, not like a question. But i thought it was really good. It wasn't a rhyming poem but it releast everything you had in your head. So yeah that's all i got to say about it. |
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