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girlskater117
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since 2006-06-06
Posts 32


0 posted 2006-06-16 08:59 AM


This one might be okay


Im driving fast...

I don't know how long im going to last...

I hope I pass...

This car fast...

Befor we crash...

Are cars are ash...

And thats all i had...

Is it that bad...

And know im sad...

But the person was alright so im glad...

That i dident crash at last...

Is that a blast...

That i dident crash...

By going fast...

And now its in my past...

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intention
Member
since 2005-11-13
Posts 59
New Delhi, INDIA
1 posted 2006-06-16 12:22 PM


thats a good one
short n simple

Love me for who i m

stargal
Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
2 posted 2006-06-16 01:19 PM


I liked it, it had nice flow...

A little confusing for me i'm afraid, for a couple of seconds i thought you had crashed, but than you didn't? I'm not sure if i'm reading this right or not, but i felt like you had crashed...

Anyway, I really liked this one by you it was an interesting sort of read, i hope to see more from you soon

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bekahlekah45
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since 2006-03-14
Posts 533

3 posted 2006-06-16 01:31 PM


yes your posts are getting better!
girlskater117
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since 2006-06-06
Posts 32

4 posted 2006-06-19 07:46 AM


Thank you
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