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electricxheart
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since 2004-09-05
Posts 184
far away from home.

0 posted 2006-06-14 10:40 PM



my heart expanding
to fit around your shallow words
in a disguise
too naïve for me to understand
as you continue to watch
me fall down
again and again
am i who you expected me to be?
this change creating
waves of quick glimpses
into a soul-
a soul (less) girl who doesn’t
know where she belongs
in a world
of this rejection
can’t stand up against the
current of rushed out lies
through pursed lips
which have persuaded me before
underneath the cold bed sheets
and i promised myself
i promised that i would seek redemption
throughout God’s eyes
what makes me run away
what makes me run away
with you by my side
mile after mile
dead smile after smile

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the_girl_next_door
Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591
USA
1 posted 2006-06-14 11:48 PM


I loved this..It was so emotional. I felt a vibe when I read this. I can see how much emotion you put into this.. great job..

Keep it up.. hope to hear more from you soon..

~Heather

ps-going in my library.

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

WaterFairy103
Member
since 2006-05-31
Posts 196

2 posted 2006-06-16 02:36 AM


current of rushed out lies
through pursed lips

WOW!!!  This is really amazing, and I think a lot of what you write and will continue to write comes from inside you.  Good job!

Dance like nobody's watching,
Love like you've never been hurt.
Sing like nobody's listening,
and Live like it's Heaven on Earth.

buttercupbaby
Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400
outside in the rain
3 posted 2006-06-16 02:57 PM


wow..that was amazing..its defiantly one of the greatest poems i've ever read..it should be on 100greatestpoems.com or w/e..it really made me think, it has so much emotion, literally, and it flowed perfectly, without rhyming..that might be why i like it So much..its great.

love
-missy

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