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Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

0 posted 2006-06-07 11:05 PM

She climbs onto the bus
Not angry, just sad.
One look at her tells me
Her day had been bad.

What should I say?
What should I do?
Make eye contact?
Or just look away?

I might say "I'm sorry,
You seem to be blue"
But maybe it's best
To grant her solitude.

Or maybe reach out with a smile or two?
What should I do?
Suggestions are welcome
If you've walked in these shoes.

If I flash her a smile,
Will she respond with a snap?
A feeble thank you?
Or a visual slap?

Sitting quietly there for over a mile
With locks on her mind,
The physical body close by,
But with a heart far apart.

The she quietly steps off
And walks slowly home
And my heart reaches out
For she looks so alone.

So I step off the bus
And shout gently to her
"I'll see you tomorrow?"
Just to show her I care.

And I go home that night
To my own precious child
And suddenly I remember
it is Friday.
*

written from the heart of a mom
who has a teen
and who worked
as a school bus monitor

don't forget to reach out
and thanks for letting
an older woman post in here

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

1 posted 2006-06-07 11:18 PM

I really enjoyed this.. I like your idea here very... well..let's just say from a different point of view.. I don't mind you writing here lol.. this is a good piece and it subsides from the usual that I read on "teen" considering you're not a teen.. very inspirational message.. I do believe it actually did me some good reading this.. hope to hear more..

~Heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2006-06-07 11:23 PM

Thanks, Heather. I promise not to hijack this forum

but just wanted all to know there are many of us here who are good listeners, and know life's road can be very rocky.
One of my favorite songs from the past, sung by Carole King, was called "You've got a Friend"
and it's good to know, when times are tough, there are people who care.

bekahlekah45
Senior Member

since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

3 posted 2006-06-07 11:32 PM

lol it hit me in the solar plexus???
no but seriously...This was really good. it kept my attention the whole time and it was just amazing. i dont mind that you post here! i love a good poem whether from a teen or adult! know yourself out! ; )
great job!

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

4 posted 2006-06-07 11:35 PM

grin, thanks for that enthusiastic reply
ok, now have some fun poeming
lol, my newest verb of the day

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

5 posted 2006-06-07 11:46 PM

Hey Midnitesun,

Awesome poem! It's good to get the "adults" side of things,
fraid it's much nicer than our side at times...lolz

No, seriously this was an amazingly pleasurable read (Yup, i'm using long words too! :P )
from start to end i couldn't stop reading, it held my attention and made me wish there was
more to read! what about a sequal? No, probably not, this one is perfect!

Thanks fer posting in the teen section, i wouldn't have seen it if you hadn't, so "i don't mind
if you post here" either

@-->---

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

6 posted 2006-06-07 11:56 PM

thanks stargal, and I've read some of your stuff...you've a good grasp of poetry and a good mind.

ok, now I must kick myself off the net and go to work. Yes, I work graveyard shift ~sigh~ g'nite and enjoy life!

bekahlekah45
Senior Member

since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

7 posted 2006-06-08 12:01 PM

graveyard shift!! woah isnt that scary!!!!

poise_and_rationality
Junior Member

since 2006-05-06

Posts 46
my mind

8 posted 2006-06-08 11:03 AM

hey midnitesun the poem is wonderful like stargal said it's good to have an adults side of teen life...if you knw what i mean? the poem is really good thanx for sharing

par
x

girlskater117
Junior Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 32

9 posted 2006-06-13 10:39 AM

I liked it. Really good. I hope to hear more.
Amber

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

10 posted 2006-06-13 01:31 PM

par, thanks!
and Amber...wanting more?

be careful what you ask for. Perhaps, next week after I return from 6 nights in a row of 'graveyard' duties. But I promise not to overdue my post-its.

I think teens are the greatest.

Jess
Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 243
Washington

11 posted 2006-06-13 01:36 PM

great job! Miss seeing you in the main room. Cant wait to see what you've got cooked up~!

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