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Little Wing
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0 posted 2006-06-05 10:44 PM


A bat born with no wings plummets to the ground
Screams, squeals, struggles, and shreiks go unfound
Closer and closer comes his painful, inevitable fate
Time disappears at a devastating rate
Giving up hope, his short life comes into focus
And as he stares off into his mind, he doesn't even notice
That the ground has already come

Time is up for this poor beautiful creature.
He was born proud, ready, and willing to live,
but in the end, was vexed by nature

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bekahlekah45
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1 posted 2006-06-06 12:39 PM


welcome to pip!!!
Awesome first post! cant wait to read more from you!
~bekah~

stargal
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2 posted 2006-06-06 12:51 PM


Well, I'm not much of a bat lover but I just had to say "awwwwwwwwwww" at the end of this poem. Kinda sad... lol

Welcome to piptalk! I hope we will be seeing more work from you soon

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bekahlekah45
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3 posted 2006-06-06 12:55 PM


lol stargal that comment made me laugh.  sorry. not in a mean way! it was just funny..okay shutting up now before i dig myslef into  a huge hole...
stargal
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4 posted 2006-06-06 09:22 AM


:O no wonder i don't like you anymore bekahlekah!

lol jk, yeah, i know it's a wierd comment, but it's what i thought at the time

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5 posted 2006-06-06 10:09 AM


WELOCME TO PASSIONS!!!!!




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6 posted 2006-06-06 10:35 AM


Nice first write. Welcome

I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality.

Little Wing
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7 posted 2006-06-06 06:08 PM


Thanks guys. Sorry if it sounds like a 10 year old wrote it, it's the first poem I've ever written.
cherrys_rule
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8 posted 2006-06-07 06:02 PM


AWWW!!!... that was sad. I almost had a tear come down.
Welcome to PiP You'll love it here.

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