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tapper798
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My own world

0 posted 2006-05-24 06:11 PM



Just say no to all the world,
the life you loved is now gone.
all because you gave it away
the sting of the hurt is so wrong.

It all piles up, soon your lost in the stack,
what to do for who, soon you start to loose track.
Maybe it'll slow down one day...
Maybe one day...
Maybe one day...

Carry me baby, carry me.
I'm so broken.
From the words left unspoken.
Carry me baby, carry me.
your heart's driving me insane
It'll never change. It'll never change.

Your burden is mine and I'm lost in the rubble,
no body notices when I begin to stumble.
All to caught up in their own problems and pains,
to notice the girl who's helped them break the chains.

Carry me baby, carry me.
I'm so broken.
From the words left unspoken.
Carry me baby, carry me.
your heart's driving me insane
It'll never change. It'll never change.

Remember me? I was always there,
Remember me? I always showed I cared.
I guess you remain under the rubble, have to stay tough,
but the mind has to wonder if it'll ever be enough...
to keep me satisfied...
I think my heart is paralyzed...

-Erin

I wrote this one a while back and just found it in my journal. Let me know what you think!

AIM-blueyed angel940
She's a question without answers...

© Copyright 2006 Erin - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2006-05-24 09:03 PM


I think you write so completely cool...I wish I could write like you do!
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2 posted 2006-05-29 12:17 PM


I'm gonna *bump* this cause I think it needs a chance for more to read it....


stargal
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3 posted 2006-05-29 12:35 PM


Hey tapper789,

WOw! This poem was so amazing; I enjoyed all of it very much.
There’s not really anything I can say, no praise that really counts…

I just wish that more people had seen this post. Also let me apologize for not posting on this one sooner, it is a definite not to miss. It is also a definite one for my library

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bekahlekah45
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4 posted 2006-06-03 07:06 PM


i like this!!  very good very good.  im impressed.  great job!
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