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themute
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since 2006-05-08
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0 posted 2006-05-23 06:35 PM



I’ve felt loves before; I love you more; I love you more
I’ve felt mere attractions too but I know for you it’s something more it’s something more
I see you everyday, you see me as a friend, yet I pretend, I pretend
I look at you, you look away; I want you more; I want you more
I’ve given up so much before, you’ve given more; you’ve given more
I’ve never felt a greater love; and you feel less, you feel less
If we leave and never meat again, remember this, remember this
I’ll love you until my end, these romantic letters I’ll not send, I’ll not send
And when you feel your life’s not true or he doesn’t love you for you
Remember true; remember true
That I loved you; I love you  


© Copyright 2006 Matthew Patrick Holbert - All Rights Reserved
Fabiani
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since 2006-05-12
Posts 123
Mesa, Az
1 posted 2006-05-23 07:35 PM


I liek this poem i can relate in my own ways great use of repetition
stargal
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since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
2 posted 2006-05-29 01:04 PM


Wow... I loved this poem! I'm not sure what i think about the repeating of some of the lines though. I guess i'm not used to that kind of style. Although, it does kind of pull the ending together, so, i think i do like it?

Great job on this one, I really liked it, and I'm going to add it to my library.

Thanks for sharing this poem, I'm sorry I am so late in posting on it.

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