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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA 
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~This a poem I wrote about a year so more ago and it's one of mine that are totally different from how I usually write.. hope you enjoy and understand. Tell me what you think.~ Staring at this blank page, a million words in my head, comtemplating what to write, all things unsaid... who followed and who lead. Keyboard ready, to put a thought onto this paper, maybe I'll catch up, with the words a little later. Pictures in my mind, telling me the world is on hold, making a quick shiver, my fingers stand cold. Time used as a decoy to get away, striving to make a better yesterday, life is dead... in a way. Letters all locked together, hidin' from a world of forever, tearing at these walls... never say never. Sitting here, words in my mind unsteady, I haven't written anything... Though my words are here already. -Heather written 2005 Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. Want nothing & you will have everything. |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
Nice Heather. Your right, it is different from how you normaly write. It flows extremely well.  Jessica |
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The Shadow in Blue Member
since 2006-05-18
Posts 493EL, Michigan |
I liked the opening stanza when you said, "Staring at this blank page, a million words in my head, comtemplating what to write, all things unsaid... who followed and who lead" because it describes me sometimes when I'm scared to act on my impulses and say/do what I really want to (that is if you interpret the page as life). But anyways really liked how it put into words how people think sometimes. ^_- Jill S. |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
thank you both very much..  ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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aliway Member
since 2006-03-05
Posts 185With in your eyes |
I like it. It’s really cool and I can relate to it *Leah |
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Junebug Junior Member
since 2006-04-23
Posts 40earth |
ok uh....i really like all the words n everything and it flows well....but uh i dont get it..really.... |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
Junebug.. this poem is like explaining throughout out the whole thing that i don't know what to write.. I don't know what to say.. time is used as a decoy.. I'm stalling from putting my thoughts down.. Life is dead.. like no emotions are being put down or anything... then the end it says that I haven't written anything (like I haven't wrote how I feel about anything) but my words are here already (I didn't mean to write what I did sort of.. like I didn't explain how I felt about anything but I ended up with this poem) hope I helped.. ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa Member
since 2003-07-16
Posts 248 |
Heather, I really liked this...it is different from anything I've read from you. I liked the message it sends, about how sometimes, when trying to write, thoughts race, and instead of a steady stream written down on paper, you have all of your thoughts speaking for themselves inside your head. It's a cool idea, and I liked the flow for most of the poem. Well Done, <3kerR When I'm good, I'm very good. But when I'm bad I'm better. |
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