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rhia_5779
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since 2006-06-09
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0 posted 2006-07-12 01:42 AM


You used me, and you knew what you were doing,
You tormented me, only caring what boys you were wooing
Laughing, if I made a mistake, you always took part
Teasing me, never caring about my ripped broken heart

I thought you were my friend,
I gave you another chance,
Again.

Each time you took what I said and twisted it, warped
Till I could hardly belief where you were going toward
You hurt me, stabbed me deep
My friendship you didn’t want to keep

But you kept me believing,
I couldn’t tell
That what I thought wasn’t what I was seeing.

I thought that I could trust you, but maybe I was wrong
I think from the beginning, our friendship wasn’t strong
You came to me, for reasons I don’t know
I went to you; I idolized you, now I’ll go

5 long years, you twisted and tore me
Turning me away from where I should be
My friends you didn’t like, why you care
Who knew, but if I wouldn’t drop them then and there

You made me get
Hell
Didn’t let me forget


Now finally I have realized, you aren’t the boss
You mistreated me, hurt me bad, totally your Loss.
I have friends better then seems that  you ever had
Since every time you dropped me, you came back.

Your friends, older
Didn’t always let you
So you came to me for a shoulder

What you found instead, was somebody you could tease
Who for a long time didn’t say anything, wanted to appease
I thought you were great, so cool so nice
Was I wrong, made the mistake of my life?

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oh_my_goshijustgotexcited
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since 2006-07-12
Posts 52
USA, IDAHO
1 posted 2006-07-12 03:21 AM


i liked this poem, alot actually! you have a very good way of getting your point across!
keep writing!  

Viola

rhia_5779
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since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334
California
2 posted 2006-07-12 10:51 AM


my ryme schemes might be kinda weird . i kinda just set them up however i want. i dont know i just like doing difffernt ryme schemes for diff poems, its more interesting
stargal
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since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
3 posted 2006-07-12 01:15 PM


Hey Rhia,

Sad poem, that kind of "friends" can scar you for life...

I liked this poem though, I like how you talked about how “you” were being abuse by this “friend” and you finally figured out that the “friend” had no control over you, that you didn’t need them.

Now finally I have realized, you aren’t the boss
You mistreated me, hurt me bad, totally your Loss.
I have friends better then seems that you ever had
Since every time you dropped me, you came back.”


my favorite part^^. It shows that you no longer care that you are free. I like that. It’s a very well written stanza and I can relate to it.

Thanks for sharing  




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broken_smile1469
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since 2006-07-02
Posts 104

4 posted 2006-07-12 06:55 PM


i loved this poem. i can really relate to it! great job
broken_smile1469
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since 2006-07-02
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5 posted 2006-07-12 06:55 PM


i loved this poem. i can really relate to it! great job
rhia_5779
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since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334
California
6 posted 2006-07-12 07:25 PM


awhile ago i just kinda told her to stop. she fought me over it, acted that i had to earn it before she would treat me decently. i ended the friendship
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