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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
This isn't as good as i hoped it would be, but i'm in a little bit of a rush since my plane leaves in a couple hours... Hope ya'll like it  ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Please, please, I’m begging you please It’s not for me, but for her Our little baby girl, who is my world Her heart, so trusting, so true, filled with love for you Would you destroy such a gift for your selfish wish? Are you a man or a coward, can you not face the truth? She’s yours, mine, ours, my very life… Now she’s two, then she’s three She’s growing faster than an apple tree And when she’s old enough to wonder What shall I say, what should I do? She’ll want to find you I know that’s true Yet when she does, what shall she see? Please kill me now, instead of than Don’t let my heart break, watching her pain… Please, please, I’m begging you please It’s not for me, but for her Our little baby girl, who is my world @-->--- |
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pullingxthextrigger Member
since 2006-05-01
Posts 133MA,..USA llx |
woah!!! stargal, stargal, stargal!!! that was great!!! i esspecially liked the part witht he apple tree---this is an excellant write keep it up ~nora<3 your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong llx - P!ATD! |
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Kaos Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317between space and time |
i don't think it's as bad as you thought... i loved it. The message and the imagery... awesome.. good wwrite Life is a torment and torment an enigma. So burn the shackles of slavery and let love run free |
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nubee Junior Member
since 2006-05-15
Posts 10 |
hey. I loved your poem. i'm really not old enough to relate to that stuff. but about its my world. i could relate. i love your poems ( even though i have read so few) I love you feedback to. heh. since my poems stink, mabey you could help.its "it wouldn't work" even if you say its stinks. lol. -thnx ryan. |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
absolutely amazing. I loved it. it's great. I am sitting here in awe. this is the best by you i have read. nice job wow. |
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