navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #7 » Running From Lost
Teen Poetry #7
Post A Reply Post New Topic Running From Lost Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Peach
Junior Member
since 2002-11-17
Posts 33


0 posted 2006-05-09 10:04 PM



I leave one place
to be in another
yet somehow I'm still stuck

I only think
of what I'm leaving behind
and I guess it's just my luck

One place is always lacking
and the other
will always be too

I look forward
but then step back
never quite sure of what to do

I don't know
what I am running from
and I don't know where this will lead

I don't know
what I am running to
or what it is I think I need

So then I try
to just stand still
but everything spins around me

I close my eyes
and tune it out
but lost I continue to be

If you don't stand for something, you'll fall for anything.

© Copyright 2006 Megan Andrews - All Rights Reserved
the_girl_next_door
Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591
USA
1 posted 2006-05-09 10:34 PM


I liked this very much.. though I feel like it started strong and then went down at the end.. the ending could have been a little stronger with a little bit more "sting" if you know what I mean.. it's like the thing that when you read it it makes you want to cry and say awww. and I loved and OMG! all at one time.. I believe that this poem was leading up to that "sting" but it just didn't happend.

but this is JMHO really.. others' may think differently..

I loved your choice of words.. Maybe I'll here more out of you more often..


~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

Sweetpali08
Junior Member
since 2006-05-07
Posts 40

2 posted 2006-05-09 11:27 PM


I loved this. You sound soo confused. But yet know what you want in life.  
Keeep it coming

"How are they the VICTIMS if they are the OCCUPIERS?!"
~Paradise now

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #7 » Running From Lost

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary