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sins_and_tragedies
Junior Member
since 2006-04-26
Posts 41
england

0 posted 2006-05-06 11:06 AM


this aint towards me or anyone i know but it gets the pointn through to poeple

Call me a retard
If that's what you think I am
Look down on me as if I'm not a human being
If that's what you feel you must do
Treat me like dirt  to make your own life feel praise worthy
I want you to know how this makes me feel though

When you think I'm dumb
It makes me wish I was
When you look at me as less then human
I certainly feel it
When you treat me like dirt
I cry myself to sleep

I'm tired of crying myself to sleep
Society is a cruel punishment

It's a wheelchair
Get over it

sat
xx

is good to face this things with a sense of poise and rationality

© Copyright 2006 Danielle - All Rights Reserved
the_girl_next_door
Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591
USA
1 posted 2006-05-06 03:20 PM


Loved it.. great point.. nonetheless.. it could've been a little more structured.. I think it would add to the poem a bit.. but.. all over.. it was great. I love how you used your poetry to explain this.. and the last two lines.. were just perfect for this..

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

poise_and_rationality
Junior Member
since 2006-05-06
Posts 46
my mind
2 posted 2006-05-06 03:25 PM


thanx it sat btw long story....
any ways thaynx for the reply

house of compusure where is your posture?

pullingxthextrigger
Member
since 2006-05-01
Posts 133
MA,..USA llx
3 posted 2006-05-06 11:09 PM


That was great!!!  awesome message but maybe structure it more like heather sed--i loved this though!
keep it up

~nora<3

your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong llx - P!ATD!

cherrys_rule
Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442

4 posted 2006-05-07 03:49 PM


I really like this one. Yeah well i have a learning disability, and sometimes my brother teases me about it. Only because he's alot smarter than me. So i understand what you are going throgh, but in a different way. If you get what i mean.
Keep Writing.

Aroura
New Member
since 2006-05-24
Posts 5
ohio
5 posted 2006-05-24 03:58 PM


i thought it was to the point and true and i loved it!
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