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Tempest
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dont eat paint chips!!!!


0 posted 05-06-2006 01:31 AM       View Profile for Tempest   Email Tempest   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Tempest


Sadly mistaken for a tragedy
My life keeps breaking right in front of me
The shards keep falling
It never ends
I want to get somewhere
But im running circles again
I go round and round
Untill I give up and just fall down
I reach for your hand
But you just turned and walked away
So on the ground ill stay
Untill the story unfolds
Untill it all opens up
I can feel it on the inside
As my body erupts
Anger blinded and starved for air
Deprived of living and nobody cares
© Copyright 2006 Bryan Girton - All Rights Reserved
ThePrayers0faBrokenHeart
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since 03-19-2006
Posts 10
guam, harmon


1 posted 05-06-2006 02:34 AM       View Profile for ThePrayers0faBrokenHeart   Email ThePrayers0faBrokenHeart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ThePrayers0faBrokenHeart

OMFG! i can so relate to this poem! like fr real ! ive been feeling like dat for weeks! like no one is ever there for me and no one cares! i sooo love this work ! even tho its short, it has meanings to it ! keep up the great work!

-chrissy x|3

"&& i realy love you and it hurts me that you dont even a damn care <<3"

stargal
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since 03-06-2006
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2 posted 05-06-2006 12:53 PM       View Profile for stargal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for stargal

Hey Tempest,

I think so far this would be my favorite by you, not that I’ve read very many of your poems, but of the ones that I have read…

As I write my reply I keep reading the poem, there is nothing I would change in this, at least nothing huge, maybe little grammar errors, but that is it! It’s such a good poem just how it is right now.

I can’t seem to pick a favorite out of all of the lines though, their all so very good, and they compliment each other, all of the lines belong where they are at…

Okay, never mind, I found it I loved these lines a lot,

”As my body erupts
Anger, blinded, and starved for air,
Deprived of living, and nobody cares”


Very nice, it kind of makes my morbid side happy… lol

Good write on this one, can’t wait to see more like this

@-->---

mgoodman1989
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since 03-05-2006
Posts 93
Iowa, USA


3 posted 08-21-2006 05:26 PM       View Profile for mgoodman1989   Email mgoodman1989   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mgoodman1989

Although I'm about 3 months late on this post, this is an awesome poem. I'm posting so that it goes back to the top, and more ppl read it. It's an awesome poem...

Much love,

Michelle
cherrys_rule
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since 03-18-2006
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4 posted 08-21-2006 06:47 PM       View Profile for cherrys_rule   Email cherrys_rule   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherrys_rule

I like this one b/c i can relate to this one so much. Man I love poems that i can relate to, and this one i can. I love that. Thaks for sharing. And once again I hope to see more in the future.
mgoodman1989
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Iowa, USA


5 posted 09-03-2006 12:48 PM       View Profile for mgoodman1989   Email mgoodman1989   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mgoodman1989

Boosting, more ppl need to read this one

*I love him oh yes I do, he's for me and not for you, and if by chance you take my place, I'll take my fist and smash your face!*

*Alli4000*
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6 posted 09-03-2006 08:59 PM       View Profile for *Alli4000*   Email *Alli4000*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Alli4000*

Wow Bryan, I really liked this poem by you.  I think you did a great job!

~Alli~
wwzwlmd8
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since 09-23-2006
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7 posted 09-25-2006 07:48 PM       View Profile for wwzwlmd8   Email wwzwlmd8   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wwzwlmd8

I enjoyed reading it I think it was great and I would be happy if you will read my poems to. Great job.

surf_painter
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since 04-10-2007
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8 posted 04-10-2007 08:49 PM       View Profile for surf_painter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for surf_painter

wow i liked this one alot, very interesting because it sounds and depicts alot that i see in everyones daily life and i am glad someone was finally able to capture a piece of the reality we live in
~XxMz.NerdyRockstarxX~
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since 01-14-2011
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Alabama, United States


9 posted 01-14-2011 08:32 PM       View Profile for ~XxMz.NerdyRockstarxX~   Email ~XxMz.NerdyRockstarxX~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~XxMz.NerdyRockstarxX~

Man the more i read from you the better it gets like i cant even explain how much i relate to this poem and for how long and you captured it in words....just WOW

~XxExpect Nothing N You'll Never Get HurtxX~

 
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