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pullingxthextrigger Member
since 2006-05-01
Posts 133MA,..USA llx |
War She sent him off With hugs and kisses With silent prayers And hopeful wishes They took him away Her baby boy And gave him a real gun Not like his old toy They told him to "suck it up" To be a "real man" So he grinned and bared it While to the battlefeilds he ran The loud "bang"s in his ears The tears on his face The "man" in front of him falls He must step up to take his place With fear in his eyes He hears one last "boom" And falls to the ground His family's doom. Back at home they say "This is for all he's done" As they hand her a medal In place of her son. ~nora <3 your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong </3 llx - P!ATD! |
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sins_and_tragedies Junior Member
since 2006-04-26
Posts 41england |
wow this poem wass intruiging to read i enjoyed reading it keep up the gd work sat x is good to face this things with a sense of poise and rationality |
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pullingxthextrigger Member
since 2006-05-01
Posts 133MA,..USA llx |
thx so much for replying ~nora <3 your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong </3 llx - P!ATD! |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
"As they hand her a medal In place of her son." Beautifully done.. I loved your choice of words and all the meaning in this poem.. great job.. ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
This was amazing. For me, their really arent any words to use to describe it. that was very well done. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Umm, I’m not really sure where to start on this one… As harsh as this may sound to everyone, this is just what happens in war, it’s sad, it violent, but sometimes it is necessary that war happens… Pullingxthextrigger- very good write on this, not one of my favorites by you, but still very nice… I also like the part where they hand her a medal in place of her son, it’s really sad, but also true that they do this, someone once told me it’s partly to make the family feel better, how that works I’m not sure… Anyway, nice job on this one, I can’t wait to see more of your poems  @-->--- |
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pullingxthextrigger Member
since 2006-05-01
Posts 133MA,..USA llx |
u guys r great lol thx for the comments ~nora<3 your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong llx - P!ATD! |
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nubee Junior Member
since 2006-05-15
Posts 10 |
war may be neccesary ( not to mock you, sorry) but it isn't all that good. we should mourn for our soliers. it should remind of us who is dying for us. -thnx ryan. would you give your life so easily? |
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Tempest Member
since 2006-04-28
Posts 247dont eat paint chips!!!! |
dont wanna seam like a downer but he is right. We should all mourn for our soldiers. because think about it,would you do it? I dont want to imply that your a wuss or anything just to say that it would be very scary. On the other hand the write itself was terrific. it was fantastic. it was superb. Need I go on? |
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:.flower.: New Member
since 2006-05-25
Posts 5 |
wow!^-^ this was the first poem i read that had lots of feeling. it was very good^-^. keep on writing. |
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